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    dots Submission Name: hiding in the darknessdots
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    Author: sword stalker
    ASL Info:    18/female/home
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 27/27/16
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 640
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 792



    Description:
       this one really has no title. i was half asleep when i wrote this. feel free to desroy it and spit it out.


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    Hiding in the darkness,
    She is deeply confused,
    What should she feel?
    What really can she do?
    Only one mind watching,
    There is pressure from him,
    She can’t figure out or know,
    What would be better for them.
    As she prays to god she screams out loud,
    Hiding in the darkness,
    Yet floating on a cloud,
    She seems to wonder,
    Forgetting about things in the past.
    If he wouldn’t have before,
    Broken her into pieces,
    Maybe she would just think,
    And give him a reason.
    She has an unbeatable pressure that will not stop,
    Times before make her want to drop,
    They make her want to quit,
    Fight away the pain for a lifetime,
    She will never be the same.




    Submitted on 2005-06-30 03:36:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it just the one thing that annoyed me about it was that 1/2 of it rhymed and 1/2 of it didnt but other than that i got the general idea of it.
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by nobody6 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey i liked it though it was kind of shakey. It lpt around from one place to another. i dont know if that was what you were going for. I think i got a general idea.
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by linx20 | [ Reply to This ]


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