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    dots Submission Name: My Redemptiondots
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    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 1061
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1845



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       THIS WRITE IS VERY, VERY REAL I WROTE ABOUT A TIME IN MY LIFE WHEN I JUST GOT OUT OF JAIL AFTER SERVING 13 MONTHS. AND HOW THE SYSTEM WANTED TO SEND ME TO PRISON. I WAS WALKING A VERY THIN LINE. I FELT LIKE THEY HAD MY PRISON NUMBER WAITING 4 ME. BUT I GOT A JOB CHANGED MY LIFE AND NOW I HAVE NOTHING LIKE THAT HANGING OVER MY HEAD. THEY DID NOT WIN.DESPITE THEIR TESTS


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    redemption
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    they got my number drawn
    they stuck me in this place
    they think it wont be long
    cause my only way is laced

    i will not let them win,
    i will not give in

    yet their pushing me
    and testing me
    their pushing me
    their testing me
    their pushing me and testing me
    testing my waters again

    i will not let them win
    i will not give in

    i need some redemption

    can't ditch this reputation
    it follows me around
    i try press on
    but they fight to hold me down
    I am so sick of you people
    im so tired of this town

    i need some redemption
    where is my redemption

    can't you people open your eyes?
    can't you fucking see?
    i am not who i use to be
    im not burning every bridge i see
    why cant you people just let me be

    fuck no.. they got my number
    they get over i get under

    i need some redemption
    where is my redemption?

    their pushing me
    and testing me
    their pushing me
    their testing me
    their pushing me and testing me
    testing my waters again

    i will not let them win
    i will not give in

    im so fuckin ill of this shit
    all this love i have, all this crap i get
    guess karma has taken over
    all this shit i gave,
    the misery i paved
    the lifes i ruined that can't be saved
    returned in full...

    when will this debt be paid?
    when will this end?

    i need some redemption
    where is redemption







    Submitted on 2005-06-30 05:08:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your anger and frustration comes through very powerfully. It takes two seconds to ruin a good reputation and a lifetime to build one. I would tell the character in this poem, to embrace the difficulty if indeed it is karma for deeds done and pain created. It is easier than feeling unjustly victimized. This is gripping - nice
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Well then...that's quite full of feeling and anger it seems, but no doubt you'd be angry if you were tired of all that...i like this piece and it is right for lyrics...it's very understandable and i don't know if it's relateable for me, but hey, whatever floats your boat....great job

    Desser
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]


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