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    dots Submission Name: Reptile Dancedots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 10
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
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       Another river inspired piece ~ watching all the cute little lizards running around the rocks.


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    Hot rock pebbled trail
    lizards performing tango
    Evening shuffles by

    Submitted on 2005-06-30 09:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tiff- I wish I had started reading your stuff long ago. This is so good. As u know how much a fan of haikus I am. Thanks

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    | Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      I love that the evening shuffles by. WHat a fab line. Got lots of images and thought provocations from that!Tangoing lizards lol...great
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the line, "evening shuffles by" it describes the way lizards seem to move quite vividly. I know this is so subtle, but the tango is a dance that is nearly mapped out in movement so I can't see these lizards doing the tango. But fandango, well the style is similar, in the stance of the dancers, so it might work better. I think tango designates long gliding steps, and even mapped out movements of the dancers. It's an idea, you might check your dictionary and see. It works fine just as it is.
    peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      cold stone night falls
    creatures dream of day
    morning brings her back
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by Deep Ace Thinks | [ Reply to This ]
      a sort of funny little read...lizards and the tango. Ive never pictured that before...i like it. Amazing isnt it? The little things you see inspire you the most. Good job
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a nice write! i disagree with cordell also. poems dont necessarily have to have a message in my opinion but messages sometimes make them better though. well i really liked the second line i thought "tango" was a good word choice. hehe.

    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      ok me love short poems however they have to have a meaning or some message this is something out of the strange files, oh well at least u tried thats all that counts all I am saying is add more and make it interesting peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]

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