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Wise words from an 8 year old


Author: confusing myslf
ASL Info:    14/f/WA
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Class/Type: Poetry /Childrens
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These were two poems that I wrote when I was eight years old. As you can see, I was a complex and deep eight year old. These poems really make you think.


Wise words from an 8 year old



(1) Hot, or not?

Hot hot. I bought or I got a new coat. But was it supposed to make me hot or not?


(2) Bay

One day, one day I think we went to the bay. But what is a bay?




Submitted on 2005-06-30 17:12:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It is interesting to read what you wrote as an eight year old...but what can one say...good for an eight year old...I'm amazed you were writting poetry then...Thank you for sharing your early work...I will have to read some of your new stuff...Thanks for sharing ...Desi
| Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
  it amazing to think back at such a young age...its funny at the same time and adorable. the kind of language one uses to complete thinking process at eight is really adorable. i like this because it brought back to my childhood and how i use to reason. bravo.
tracey
| Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah it made me think... but than i stoped because i was just confusing mu self. A coat makes you feel warm so you wont be cold and a bay. I"m stupid so whats a bay. well this of pretty cool.
Kay
| Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]


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