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    dots Submission Name: Vampyredots

    Author: Tears of Azrael
    ASL Info:    14/F/Lost
    Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 107/102/25
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Prose/Vampire
    Total Views: 850
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 776

       My first prose, inspired after watching "Constantine."

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    Vampyres. We are those cast down from Heaven or neglected from Hell. We are not worthy for the living but not damned enough for death. As the traces of beings long forgotten, we linger at the liminal threshold of dreams. All human emotions are mere things of life, things we feel no more. After all...we are not humans any longer, only denizens of the night.
    But for cheating life and death, we have also been cheated, for we only know sadness, crimson remorse. Cursed with eternal melancholy, we stand by the sidelines and watch as the world drifts by in lost momentum. We are forever rehearsing a play that will never be performed. We are the show that entertains a dead audience, and, like decripit photographs, we are shattered visions frozen in black and white.

    Submitted on 2005-06-30 17:38:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is pretty good work. I think maybe it might work better in poetic form as free verse? Just a thought.


    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      hey long time no see..i thought it was pretty kool, constantine was an awesome movie. i liked the fact that u based it off the movie, with the whole heaven/hell thing. i really see nothing wrong with this, other than the fact that you should probably use seperate lines, that way the write is not that cluttered.
    i always enjoy reading your stuff, keep em coming!

    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by xeternalshadowx | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful...i love your inspiration from that movie. I saw it too and i fell in love with it- the idea of it and i really wanted to write something about it but my thoughts got corrupted with everything going on in my life. Yet when i read what you wrote, it brought back the thoughts i had about the movie and that's exactly what i thought about.

    The heaven and hell part and also the cheating death part. The part where we prepare for a performance that will never take place. All of that is just wonderful. I really loved what you did with it.

    Would of been nicer in separate sentences but then i am clueless at what prose it anyhow. I just liked the title and wondered what it was about and i also like the way you write your thoughts out on paper so i just had to see what was going on.

    I don't have any other comments cause i don't see anything wrong with the piece that you wrote.

    congrads. Wonderful. i loved it very much.
    Keep writing. You got it in you.
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]

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