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    dots Submission Name: Remindsdots

    Author: Lies
    ASL Info:    18/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 56/31/6
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       IT's funny how something can remind you of something else. This is all it is.
    Tonight, being somewhere, reminded me of someone and I hate the feeling.

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    The ticking of the clock
    Reminds the sun to go down.
    The marking of the Calender
    Reminds another day has gone by.
    The ripping of a to-do-list
    Reminds it's all been done.
    The clanging of church bells
    Reminds of the 12th hour.
    The breaking of a pencil
    Reminds of lost words.
    The fact you left
    Reminds me you'll never be back.

    Submitted on 2005-06-30 19:09:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good. As everyone else before has said, short and to the point. It's easy to follow and the point was so clear. The wording that you used was...mature, and beautiful. You show emotion and pain, but you didn't overdo it and make yourself out to be a drama queen. Your writings just keep getting better and better, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm normally i dont like short poems but i like tis one its short and simple.its to the point but not too quick but in just enough time to grab you attention and to just enough time to make you feel your pain
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and to the point! really well done! this has impact and you set this up well for the last line. Really liked it! :)

    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      simple in other words WOW!. I loved the last two stanzas
    The breaking of a pencil
    Reminds of lost words.
    The fact you left
    Reminds me you'll never be back.
    the first stanza. I don't know why... but i liked it. and the last. that was just like...awwww... you get me. well this was a cool poem.
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! that is a really good poem, simple but at the same time clever...i really like it...its one of my faves..its cute the last two lines, and it is obvious that that was your intention. the title fits perfectly on the words, GREAT JOB...ill add them to my faves
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]

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