The ticking of the clock
Reminds the sun to go down.
The marking of the Calender
Reminds another day has gone by.
The ripping of a to-do-list
Reminds it's all been done.
The clanging of church bells
Reminds of the 12th hour.
The breaking of a pencil
Reminds of lost words.
The fact you left
Reminds me you'll never be back.
This was good. As everyone else before has said, short and to the point. It's easy to follow and the point was so clear. The wording that you used was...mature, and beautiful. You show emotion and pain, but you didn't overdo it and make yourself out to be a drama queen. Your writings just keep getting better and better, keep it up! ~Kriss
hmmm normally i dont like short poems but i like tis one its short and simple.its to the point but not too quick but in just enough time to grab you attention and to just enough time to make you feel your pain
simple in other words WOW!. I loved the last two stanzas The breaking of a pencil Reminds of lost words. The fact you left Reminds me you'll never be back. the first stanza. I don't know why... but i liked it. and the last. that was just like...awwww... you get me. well this was a cool poem. Kay
wow! that is a really good poem, simple but at the same time clever...i really like it...its one of my faves..its cute the last two lines, and it is obvious that that was your intention. the title fits perfectly on the words, GREAT JOB...ill add them to my faves *Anita*