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    dots Submission Name: I misseddots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       The meaning here is extremely easy to grasp...so tell me what you think, I really don't like it but I thought I would open it up to interpretation/critism/praise, however you feel.

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    dotsI misseddots

    I had a chance to be with you
    I had a chance to belong in your arms
    now it's gone
    they say it shouldn't hurt

    but it's like I lost my chance to breathe
    I lost my chance to live
    like you were there just for me and now you are dying too
    it's like you can't come back

    and just this once I wanna know

    if there are second chances
    I want to know if I can come back from dying
    do you believe in miracles or have I lost

    a second chance to breathe
    a second chance to be with you
    a second chance were I can try to survive

    I had a chance to be with you
    and something went wrong
    they say I should hurt
    and I do
    I deserve the pain

    I had a chance and I messed up
    I didn't see you standing there
    my ignorance has put me in a place I wanna leave
    but thats okay...if you are happy

    Submitted on 2005-07-01 15:29:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thats really good, im sick of my time, so dont think im ignorant for not giving u the credit u deserve, great write...Solemn Star
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this one. All of the time I try to hope and wish that I could go back and take a second chance. Unfortuantly we can't. We're stuck with our decisioins each and every day. And that's what this poem says to me. We can't wait for people to leave. We've only got one chance: now. Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by vbnz | [ Reply to This ]
      How can you not like this poem? This is a sweet poem. You sould go up to that person and ask him for forgivines (if you love him). I can't really relate to this poem. but it was still a nice poem
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]

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