Tis engrossing stuff - its desperate and hopeful in equal measure. And pretty coherant compared to my stream of concious, too - loved the way you question yourself mid write just to quell your doubts. If I went on I'd just be repeating what others have said. Keep it up, comrade.
loved the stream very much...this ambiguity is what makes for interesting interpretation...what could I make of your stream of thoughts...the end but yet the beginning, or as you put it "half-time" the lull inbetween moments...maybe the sad times, the good times from a distance could become sorrowful, from how youve spent hte future of the good times... your poem ends in a great way, because whether or not the rest of the poem connects, the last stanza MAKES it connect. I like your analogy of the Phoenix (constantly rebuilding itself out of its own ashes and continuing on). Like this poem, it is sort of about the points inbetween, and then just continuing on with the flow...continuing on with the stream. Sweet Stream, sweet stream, The boat is here it's time to leave, jc prescott