Description: Don't ever look back, unless you are flipping through the pages of your heart. I know this now, smiles drift but they always return. Chin up lovlies, all will survive when your heart is stronger than your mind.
These are my thoughts all rolled into a lovely ball of goo. Enjoy.
Sitting on a Cloud -------------------------------------------
Sitting on a rainbow
Looking through my closet
Picking up that old clown
Memories of the past
Flipping through the pages of my heart
Skies fallen and lifted
Soul taped and torn
Sitting on a cloud
Looking away from the ground
Bewitched by the growing light
Welcomed to the ending night
The echos of laughter resounding in my ears
Tear lifted from my eye
Prompted to find the greater good
Discovering the lesser evil
Drifting through the stars
Smile on my face
Acknowledging the shapes of the world
Loving every day
Hoping against hope that it doesn't end
And daring it to
Rushing forward into life
This is incredibly beautiful. For some reason, it brings to mind just sitting in my bedroom floor, sifting through all the letters, ticket stubs, drawings, pictures, and memories from the good times in my life(I think it's because of the first stanza). But you mananged to combine some of my favorite things: Memories, stars, rainbows, laughter, and clouds. Cause clouds are cool. Like I said, this was a beautiful poem. Thank you so much for your comments, and for your concern. Maybe I'll be alright.
I really like the description you gave with this, it is so true! And there is much wisdom in the words of you poem too! Keep believing what you wrote here for it sounds like strong and wise wisdom for us all! !Doc`
Wow! good job my dear, I really do not find what to say because my fellow writers said everything about your poem. I really agree with them that it is a lovely poem and the idea is great. I also like this lines " Picking up that old clown Memories of the past Flipping through the pages of my heart " that is a great image. well done. I wish you could have a look at " Crying Out " and tell me what do you think about it?
whoa. I know what this is about. I think. It sounded famillar or sumthing. well i think i think i kno wut this is about. Good write. It was nice how it rhymed. I do love me some rhyming here and dar. lol Past? I'm thinkin so. But w/e it is, it was a good write, once again.
Love the thoughts in this, I dwell on the past way too much. Couldn't really find much I would change, this is so refreshing. Just one little critique came to mind, in this line; "The echos of laughter echoing in my ears" I think it would sound better as; "the echos of laughter resounding in my ears.." or "the resounding echo of laughter in my ears." Just a suggestion. Amazing piece, wow, I really love this alot! Thanks for sharing, write on :)