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    dots Submission Name: Sitting on a Clouddots
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    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 903
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    Description:
       Don't ever look back, unless you are flipping through the pages of your heart. I know this now, smiles drift but they always return. Chin up lovlies, all will survive when your heart is stronger than your mind.

    These are my thoughts all rolled into a lovely ball of goo. Enjoy.


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    dotsSitting on a Clouddots
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    Sitting on a rainbow
    Looking down
    Looking through my closet
    Picking up that old clown
    Memories of the past
    Flipping through the pages of my heart
    Skies fallen and lifted
    Soul taped and torn

    Sitting on a cloud
    Looking away from the ground
    Bewitched by the growing light
    Welcomed to the ending night
    The echos of laughter resounding in my ears
    Tear lifted from my eye
    Prompted to find the greater good
    Discovering the lesser evil

    Drifting through the stars
    Smile on my face
    Knowing
    Acknowledging the shapes of the world
    Loving every day
    Hoping against hope that it doesn't end
    And daring it to
    Rushing forward into life






    Submitted on 2005-07-01 21:04:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is incredibly beautiful. For some reason, it brings to mind just sitting in my bedroom floor, sifting through all the letters, ticket stubs, drawings, pictures, and memories from the good times in my life(I think it's because of the first stanza). But you mananged to combine some of my favorite things: Memories, stars, rainbows, laughter, and clouds. Cause clouds are cool. Like I said, this was a beautiful poem. Thank you so much for your comments, and for your concern. Maybe I'll be alright.
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the description you gave with this, it is so true! And there is much wisdom in the words of you poem too! Keep believing what you wrote here for it sounds like strong and wise wisdom for us all!
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write. It was honest and that is important. I liked the way emotion was put forth in this. I like rhyme schemes personally, but a rhyme doesn't make a poem. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! good job my dear, I really do not find what to say because my fellow writers said everything about your poem. I really agree with them that it is a lovely poem and the idea is great. I also like this lines
    " Picking up that old clown
    Memories of the past
    Flipping through the pages of my heart "
    that is a great image. well done. I wish you could have a look at " Crying Out " and tell me what do you think about it?
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa. I know what this is about. I think. It sounded famillar or sumthing. well i think i think i kno wut this is about. Good write. It was nice how it rhymed. I do love me some rhyming here and dar. lol Past? I'm thinkin so. But w/e it is, it was a good write, once again.

    Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the thoughts in this, I dwell on the past way too much. Couldn't really find much I would change, this is so refreshing. Just one little critique came to mind, in this line; "The echos of laughter echoing in my ears" I think it would sound better as; "the echos of laughter resounding in my ears.." or "the resounding echo of laughter in my ears."
    Just a suggestion. Amazing piece, wow, I really love this alot! Thanks for sharing, write on :)
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by DisilusndDreamr | [ Reply to This ]


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