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Here in this poem I'm describing myself with those trees which stand still against the harsh storm, that Arabian horse which is cured and is good now, and so on.... all I wanna to say in this poem that I've passed my terrible failure with my ex-faincee and I'm going on my life as any usual person. Hope you will like it.
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The unexpected storm has passed has not come up with much harms the mighty trees stand still Nothing to take out their fixed roots. That wounded Arabian horse with this broken leg is fine now and stop bleeding. Came back to his usual life. The screams of this little kids turned into loud smiles. After rebuilding their beautiful sand castles which destroyed by the harsh waves of the sea. The sun has came back again To rise and shine the whole earth. After along period of darkness and bad cloudy weather. Peace and love are everywhere. No more pains... No more tears... No more fears... |
Submitted on 2005-07-02 12:25:36 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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A break up is always tough but don't let it keep you from living life. Sometimes we have love, sometimes we lose love. We may hurtt for awhile but seeing the other person move on helps us to move on. If we gave in each time we'd get a broken heart we'd be showing weakness when we contain so much strength- just as you do. Best of luck| | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ] | I like your poem. The horse with the broken leg continued on. It took time to heal that leg just like it will take time to mend a broken heart. Guess what? You will be O.K! Sure a break up hurt, but hurt can be overpowered by the need of want. Wanting to go on after the cloud has passed. Brightness appear. In your life, that form of brightness will be someone who's going to love you unconditionally. Great job! I wish you luck in finding your "brightness". Wanda | | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ] | i like this one. | it was really creative and very emotional. im really sorry to hear what happed about your girl.. i could see your pain. it was really well written. 'The screams of this little kids turned into loud smiles. After rebuilding their beautiful sand castles which destroyed by the harsh waves of the sea.' i really like this part. the whole poem seems to be saying that bad things have happend but life is going on. which is a powerful lesson and something that is so hard to do. i like the ending too. it was a really good last statment. overall. i loved it.- jennifer | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ] | This poem is interesting and I'm glad you got out of marrying someone who isn't right for you. false love an be such a hassel and it's good that you remain positive after dealing with one. | Keep writing! -Catina | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Boom-boom | [ Reply to This ] | Aaaah . . .one powerful reclaiming of self poem that is absolutely inspiring!The use of metaphors and imagers is not is the slightest bit cliché- really original and beautiful! Hope the feeling u describe is this poem last. | Remain strong Keep spreading the love Nadia* | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ] | hi buddy this is a very nice poem. I am glad the bad time has passed and you are enjoying your life again. I really am very happy for you, I wish I could say the same thing about myself. | Now to your poem, I simply love it, it is like a beautiful painting, with great imaginaries. It has a very good flow to it and the ending is perfect. The sun has came back again To rise and shine the whole earth. After along period of darkness and bad cloudy weather. Peace and love are everywhere. No more pains... No more tears... No more fears... The whole poem was good but the one above is my favourite stanza. You have done a wonderful job once again my friend, keep up the good work. With love shabnam | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ] | |
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