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    dots Submission Name: In Love, Elementallydots
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    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Written in a moment of random pel-mel inspiration out side of a library. There was a sidewalk artist there, we chatted. There was something about his sheer existance, so simple and so unobtrusive that really made me feel whole for just a moment. Nothing like sidewalk artist to really bring you inspiration.


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    dotsIn Love, Elementallydots
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    Outside a downtown library
    where painting men paint
    and chit chat,
    twittering with brushes and children,
    they crack jokes
    and let peace reflect off of their
    balding scalps.
    Because the painting men paint
    and are happy.
    They revolve in doors of
    chit chatting
    to pass the time,
    and praise the lack of income
    from selling pavement art to society.
    It rains on his elements
    but it just bounces back
    and drys in his beat-up blue hatchback.
    Because you can't keep an artist down
    when he's in love so
    elementally.




    Submitted on 2005-07-02 14:46:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like descriptive poems like this of random things that you do during a day. It makes me see things through someone else's eyes for just that moment when I read this piece.

    Yes, there is a lack of income for these artists, but that is the ephemeral beauty, both of their work and their reason for doing so. You have managed to capture that, I think. That they are happy inside, rather than worrying about things financially, which is more important, I think.

    Thank you for showing me a snapshot like this. It was appreciated. Peace
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Awe... how sweet.

    Such a nice felling here. I think you capture the moment quite well.

    but it just bounces back
    and drys in his beat-up blue hatchback.

    This is a vividly beautiful line. (Although I think you meant dries.)

    Nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]


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