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Prove Me Wrong


Author: angelfyre
ASL Info:    17/yes please/here
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Words: 208
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I started with this title for the first bit of the poem I wrote...then when I finished it a few days later...the title just didn't seem to fit anymore. I can't think properly right now, so if anyone can think of a better title....I'd appreciate it. and I dont really like how it ends....what do you think


Prove Me Wrong



I look in your eyes and see
where my dreams are born
and where my hate goes to die.
All my love lies in your dialated pupils.
Soft lips whispering sweet nothings
Strong hands giving as much assurance as possible in these shakey times.
every passing second gives us more meaning
more truth
more love

So I sat, just outside of heaven,
an angel within my grasp.
When days and nights blur into one happy cloud,
that is when you know you are in love.

I float on your essence.
Smile in your arms.
Fly in our love.
Get lost in your eyes.

The moon is but a firefly in my reality.
An ember compared to your flame.

Embrace my jealoust as naturally as you would my admiration.
For it magnifies my love.
Amplifies my devotion.

The King Of My Dreams smothers me with the right kind of tears.
His sweet breath
is the warm breeze on my pale skin.
Soft spoken "I love you"s have never sounded so close.
So clear.

A stranger smiles at my paper cut and kisses my salty cheeks.
Seperated from my reality.
You are what I'm fighting for.
I was made for you.




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  I love this poem Kris, if i recall correctly you wrote this for... lol? Anyway it's perfect just the way it is. But if you want to change tthe title i'll throw some ideas out there, i love coming up with titles lol... "King of my dreams" "Heaven Can Wait" "All That I am" ok i'm done for now

Later m'love : )
| Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by Tim8806 | [ Reply to This ]
  GOD DAMIT... that is awsome. you really dont know how much that reminds me of the girl that im in love with... i cant belive it... im really glad i read it, its going on my favs, it brought lost tears back in my eyes, for it reminds me of my 1 sum1... i really hope things work for you and u become happy ... great write, keep in touch...AJ
| Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought that this was realy good. About your title problem you might try something like always loving or my loving angel or something along those lines. the only thing with the ending is i didnt get the line about the stranger kissing your salty cheecks.
| Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]


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