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    dots Submission Name: Blind By Choicedots
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    Author: WandWielder
    ASL Info:    21-f-maryland
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 55/62/16
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 969
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       I submitted this one to the international library of poetry for whos who in poetry 2004 and it's actaully the first poem in the book now that it's out. I'm jsut looking for person to person feed back on what real people think


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    dotsBlind By Choicedots
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    Have you ever looked about the world
    To ponder why it renews?
    Have you ever looked upon the sky
    To wonder why it's blue,
    Ran your fingers across the grass
    To ponder why it grows,
    Looked inside yourself
    And wondered what you truly know?

    Have you ever peered out at the world
    At all humanity,
    Gazed about the universe
    At all there is to see,
    From smallest ant
    To those that fly,
    Have you ever stopped to ponder
    The truth of why we are?
    Have you ever stopped to wonder?




    Submitted on 2005-07-02 20:30:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting title and how it all fits with this. It really got my attention and that's why I chose to read this. Good work with that.

    This piece really makes one think a lot, wonder. And it's sad that one has to hear things from other people before we do them ourselves. Congrats on the book. It's worthy of publication.
    | Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by K | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this until the last three lines... those killed it for me, I don't know why. Then again I can't think of any better way to close this sort of poem, sorry to leave you with no suggestions, I love up until then though, if you edit it or something be sure to let me know so I can re-read it.

    Maryland Rocks!
    Tom
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      The last line left me hanging ...like I was expecting one more line to clinch it all,,,seize the whole thing...like the finale...great piece, wrap it up and make it all happen.
    <wink>
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by sunnysideup | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo I like this a lot. Every word is so pretty. And I love the title. Its amazing how some people just never stop to wonder. This is really good. Congratulations on being in the book. Yay :-) Great job. I love it.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      great write, ohh yes i do wonder at these things daily the widow's hourglass, the recluse with it's violin, the hard work ethic of the ant which puts people to shame. i love the hues in the sky the dark blue up above and the lighter hues on the horizon it's lovely. the clouds Cirrus(horse tails), Altocumulus (fishy scales), culminus (cotton balls), and most of all the Culminumbus (thunderheads) also with wonder comes appreciation at times. nice one, mike
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]


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