Description: I submitted this one to the international library of poetry for whos who in poetry 2004 and it's actaully the first poem in the book now that it's out. I'm jsut looking for person to person feed back on what real people think
Blind By Choice -------------------------------------------
Have you ever looked about the world
To ponder why it renews?
Have you ever looked upon the sky
To wonder why it's blue,
Ran your fingers across the grass
To ponder why it grows,
Looked inside yourself
And wondered what you truly know?
Have you ever peered out at the world
At all humanity,
Gazed about the universe
At all there is to see,
From smallest ant
To those that fly,
Have you ever stopped to ponder
The truth of why we are?
Have you ever stopped to wonder?
I loved this until the last three lines... those killed it for me, I don't know why. Then again I can't think of any better way to close this sort of poem, sorry to leave you with no suggestions, I love up until then though, if you edit it or something be sure to let me know so I can re-read it.
Ooo I like this a lot. Every word is so pretty. And I love the title. Its amazing how some people just never stop to wonder. This is really good. Congratulations on being in the book. Yay :-) Great job. I love it.
great write, ohh yes i do wonder at these things daily the widow's hourglass, the recluse with it's violin, the hard work ethic of the ant which puts people to shame. i love the hues in the sky the dark blue up above and the lighter hues on the horizon it's lovely. the clouds Cirrus(horse tails), Altocumulus (fishy scales), culminus (cotton balls), and most of all the Culminumbus (thunderheads) also with wonder comes appreciation at times. nice one, mike