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    dots Submission Name: Love through the sanddots

    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsLove through the sanddots

    Walking hand in hand looking at the crystal water and feeling the warm sand

    never speaking
    just knowing
    never thinkng
    just feeling

    knowing that you will always be there and always love me makes life worth living

    always loving
    always caring
    and always giving

    that feeling your love gives me....... i just cant put it into words
    To think that our love will ever fade is absurd

    Submitted on 2005-07-02 22:18:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This write reminded me of that "footprints" thing and I realized it that it could also be about God as well so my hat is off to you for capturing true love with words and i'm going to be honest i read this several times, and it brought a smile to my face each one. favorited!

    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by The Wolverine | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... I love this. I love the whole line, then

    the short lines.
    never speaking
    just knowing
    never thinkng
    just feeling

    I love this stanza. Its beautiful. Even though everyone else has pretty much said what I felt about this I thought I would tell you that you did a great job.
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      It almost sounds as if it would be a really great beginning to a song. Do you play any instruments? If you do you should definately put music to it, and maybe add a little more for music sake. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by kriley6497 | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem should be called "Love Through The Sand". pretty u ilke it gena! call me!sry moms been on da phone forever!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my gosh. i love the structure of this poem. it makes parts stand out and seem so much more powerful. the poem is so serious yet it has this wistful feeling. oh, it's so awesome! the first line really gets you lured in. kudos.
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
      Agreed totally with them
    I loved the form on this
    I'll say it was original
    But then some random dude will come out of hiding and say he wrote like that first
    I liked the wording on this
    It has a message we all can relate to
    Relationships can be wonderful
    Or they can be the worst thing ever
    Good Job-
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      An idealistic dream for at least all of us, ne?

    I am just saying that, that kind of love may never exsist for some of us poor people our there.

    More to the point now. Your poem was good. It had alot of feel to it. One thing though. Maybe you could have made it a little longer.
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude, i know just how u feel, ive gone through the ecxact same thing, even right now, me and my gf just broke up, and are on the verge of getting back together, but who knows, srry not to get off track, i really liked the way u spaced it, and the thought u put in it was awsome, great job...AJ
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by Solemn Star 88 | [ Reply to This ]

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