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Author:	UnspokenDreamer
ASL Info:	21
Elite Ratio:	4.22 - 542/753/205
Words:	298

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Bytes:	1942

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If you have access to download the song "A Cat Named Virtute" By: The Weakerthans, do it and just simply listen to the music, not the lyrics as you read this poem. Take it slow, and just think about the words. I don't expect much of a poetic critique for this one, just take it in... breath.

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I finally got inside my mind.
It's funny,
How long I've spent trying to find me.
I mean, I'm me... where could I have gone?
Maybe you've noticed,
I try hard to help people
I truly care about you all,
But why?
Why is it that I care so much?
When others seem to care so little.
It's like I think I can fix the world,
One person at a time.
But ya know...
I'm not trying to fix the world,
I've really just been trying to fix me.
Maybe you'll understand, maybe you won't
Sometimes my glass is half empty
Sometimes it's half full
But in this day-and-age
It doesn't even matter, simply raise your hand
And ask for a refill.
What's it like to truly do without?
I think we've forgotten how good we really have it,
I know I have.

So step back from yourself,

For a moment...

Breath

Look at the world around you

Smile... not for them, not for me

Just smile because you want to

When is the last time you laughed out loud when you were all by yourself?
Have we forgotten everything?
Enjoy every moment,
You never know when those moments will come to an end.
Have you ever been close to dieing?
It makes you realise how much you've left undone,
How many people you wish you had told
"I love you"
I mean, why does that have to be awkward?
Just say it, let them know that they are important to you.
I know thats how I felt,
When I thought the moment was my last.
Now that I've lived on,

I stepped back

I took a breath

And I smiled...

I just smiled

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  Awww I love this. Every word is beautiful. You made like a hundred good points, so I won't point them all out cause that would take forever. But I think my favorite was:

"I mean, why does that have to be awkward?
Just say it, let them know that they are important to you."

Thats something I should definitely work on. I never tell people how much I actually care. I dont know why. I also like:

"When is the last time you laughed out loud when you were all by yourself?
Have we forgotten everything?
Enjoy every moment,
You never know when those moments will come to an end."

I dont even know what to say about that. I love it. I like the title too.

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  here i go crying again.
death is a funny thing, how it creeps up on you and slams into you at the same time.
i know what it feels like to be so close to being dead you don't even breathe.
i think i've died once technically,
i was lucky.. was all.
and yes, i stepped back and smiled. and now i don't hesitate to do anything, i don't hold back a thing.
it's rather sad though,
how differant it is
when it is someone you care about hurting,
instead of you.
you lose control and you don't know what to do.. you can't even eat, let alone smile.
my favorite lines are:
"Sometimes my glass is half empty
Sometimes it's half full
But in this day-and-age
It doesn't even matter, simply raise your hand
And ask for a refill."

eventually it's gotta run out somewhere though.

this was really good though,
i read it slowly, picturing it being read by adam gnade.. a poet.
i really like it. the emotion and everything. the optimisim.
it makes me want to go outside and lay in a field of sunflowers.
| Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by fallingingreen | [ Reply to This ]
  Right away when I saw the title I was like...I have to read this, it already reminds me of myself in many ways. I feel that lucy gave you the words I would be saying.

smile.. just to smile. Ah you'll find me out there in my mind just smiling. Something I learned from my grandmother. It was quite fascinating to see her through the window, sitting on the porch just smiling. I'd ask her why...she would say. " oh, michael,because I like to smile, it is good to smile." then i would smile...

And laughing out loud just at a spontanious time, out of no where. I've found myself in that situation many,many times. It is great.!

Thanks for the read.

-mike

i to will add this to my favs-with a smile.
I will just smile.
| Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
  I LOVE IT. It's not that it's the best poetry, as you probably already knew, but the content and just what it says is beautiful. The first part you ask... "I mean, I'm me... where could I have gone?" I've been 'finding' myself lately...it's quite the adventure.
"Why is it that I care so much?
When others seem to care so little.
It's like I think I can fix the world,
One person at a time."
Oh my! That is so me...whenever I see someone struggling of suffering I think...Now, I can help them. I can fix things for them, make it all better. One person at the time, I can change the world! Mwaha! I care so much, and it's returned with people forgetting about me. MEH.

"Sometimes my glass is half empty
Sometimes it's half full
But in this day-and-age
It doesn't even matter, simply raise your hand
And ask for a refill."

Awesome. Just ask for a refill...how profound. Awesome, again....

"When is the last time you laughed out loud when you were all by yourself?"
Alright; People who know me know that sometimes, I will randomly start laughing. It's weird, right? But I'm glad that I can laugh at little things and find things that are funny. I'm not sure why they are but...I'm grateful for a small laugh every now and then.

"How many people you wish you had told
"I love you"
I mean, why does that have to be awkward?"
Totally. I mean, seriously, if I was going to die in ten minutes, I have a list of people I would call and things I would tell them. What's stopping me? Why does it have to be so awkward....

"I stepped back

I took a breath

And I smiled...

I just smiled"

Profound, again. I smiled, and I just smiled. This, my friend, is going in my favorites. I'd love to see some more stuff like this.....Congradulations. I love it.

Peace, LucyDiamond
| Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah...

I’ve been obsessing with the relationship between Life and Death for years now and I still accept the fact that Death is essential for people to know how to live. Once a person figures out that s/he has an end… that person would begin to hold on to Life… utilize every moment to its fullest. Of course there is a state of denial wherein people become overly cautious with their actions. But once they’ve accepted the inevitable… they’d be willing to slide down the stairs… or take the highway… light a stove with a match… or ride a roller coaster. It’s really not that complicated… Death makes life beautiful.

I understand how silent analyses often lead to these kinds of revelations… something like… shutting up and listening to what the Universe has to say. And, then, you’ll find answers you never thought existed within you. It’s arduous, but necessary because if we can’t live for ourselves… then why do we bother living at all. Sure we can be selfless… but that won’t exactly be living… that would simply be existing… at least… that’s what I think so.

Anyway…

Thank you for writing that. It gave me a chance to tilt my head and nod a little.

Keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]

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