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    dots Submission Name: A Mechanical Music Machinedots
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    Author: xdollpartsx
    ASL Info:    17/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    5.52 - 77/41/9
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 291
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    Description:
       The influence music can have on you as it seems to become almost part of your body, to me is stronger than any drug. To me it still needs work, but after all this time I feel I must post this now incase I can not improve it anymore.


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    dotsA Mechanical Music Machinedots
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    I'm a cloud just for the moment.
    Soft vision, no defined edges,
    senses strengthened yet delayed.
    Happily and beautifully numb,
    mesmerised by the beat of a drum,
    and the dry truthful voice,
    the deep soul shaped into sound.

    The tip tap tread and
    the rhythmic pulsation throb.
    A mechanical music machine,
    the biorhythm body clock, tick-tocks.

    Syllabolic flow flutter mutter.
    The voice like liquid drone,
    full of vibrant fruitfulness,
    a colour never painted or envisioned,
    releases intimate passion

    A sweet nectar, smoothes an edge,
    like the harmony sooths a note.
    Not everything is what it seems
    influenced by this dream.




    Submitted on 2005-07-03 14:41:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      YES! Music is my 24-7! It’s not my anti-drug though... drugs are my anti-drug...

    At any rate- I can tell you are a Mrs. Love-Cobain fan... That damn Kurt killer! lolful! -I hear good things about her new band though...

    At any rate- good work expressing what you wanted to say- came through loud and clear to me... Awesome title too-

    Peace, love and the book of Mormon... !SiX!
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the wordplay in this, but I would like to see more concrete images here. GTG.


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    Joe6y
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]



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