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    dots Submission Name: To Dream/A chancedots

    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I woke up from a dream and couldnt go back to sleep for a while so it got me thinking about dreams. I ended up writing down the things i came up with and this is what i got. I think i spelled some words wrong plz tell me.

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    dotsTo Dream/A chancedots

    To dream is a chance to escape
    To hide from the harshness of reality and fate
    Its a chance to emmerse yourself in a world of fantasy

    A chance to see things you cant see
    A chance to be something you might never become

    To dream is wraping yourself in a blanket of wishes and leting your imagination go wild

    To dream is like being in heaven if only for a few hours

    In your dreams the harsh and overbarring world has no powers

    To dream is like being in paradise........and my dreams are something i am never willing to sacrafice

    Submitted on 2005-07-03 19:58:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one is structured a little better. IT seems that you bounce between a poetic structure and then into run on sentences. I did love what you wrote though, the content was very original and heartfelt. I wondr what inspired it. My favorite part is the very beginning:

    To dream is a chance to escape
    To hide from the harshness of reality and fate
    Its a chance to emmerse yourself in a world of fantasy

    Very nice though!!
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by kriley6497 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. This was really good. Only one bad comment and it's just a spelling error. Instead of "paradice" it should be "paradise".. just an FYI thing.. other than that.. its so real. This is stuff that people can relate to and I think thats awesome. Keep up the good writing!
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      this was so beautifull.ya i rather be in my dreams then anywhere else in the world just to escape. this was good and this is honest not just bcz ur my best friend! but ur a brilliant writer! good job and i love you so much
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      when i dream it's like i'm parting the sea
    freeing slaves so that they can be free
    in my dreams i can never be me
    never have 2 experience pain
    it's a shame how i forsake my name
    just 2 have peace 4 few hours
    in my dreams only i hold the power

    that was just a lil freestyle that this poem brought on. this one was good and true. it was structured weird but i rapping as i was reading so that's alway's a good thing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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