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    dots Submission Name: Fatherhooddots
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    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       Another poem written a long time ago. I am sure you can feel the emotions I poured into this. As I am also sure you have experianced the same.

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    Ben


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    The prerequisites of fatherhood are so much more
    Than the performance of a simple biological function.
    It is more than being the breadwinner,
    More than carving the Thanksgiving turkey.

    When a father holds his newborn for the first time,
    Ageless emotions are realized.
    Fear of failure is unfounded; instinctively one knows what is needed.

    To always be there is not enough.
    The child and his welfare should always be on his mind.
    The challenge is to succeed where you feel your father has failed.

    A father never forgets his childhood, nor should he hinder his child’s.
    Let him be a kid, to grow and learn at his own pace.
    No matter the obstacles, the setbacks, the futility,
    Love is the key.
    Learn to love and child rearing is easy.

    One cannot learn to be a father
    It must be experienced
    It cannot be taught
    It must be lived.

    Rewards?
    The only reward necessary is when I walk in
    After a long day’s frustrations and your child runs to
    Hug you and says
    “I love you daddy”
    Truly the ultimate reward







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      Holly Molly this is great.
    I came across this while reading some poems faved by someone else.
    I am a father and your words spoke to me in volumes.
    I have written many times of being a father. I have been rewarded with poems back from my daughters who have enriched my life without measure. My sons have brought nothing but
    joy to my life.
    I am a sucker for writes of this nature because they speak of something that can only be attained through raising a child. So, I will fav this one for its pure honesty and experience that all young fathers will hopefully achieve as they raise their own children.

    Deepest Respect and Admiration

    CLyde
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      What a beautiful poem that every Dad should read. A very emotional poem indeed! Very well written. For a Dad to love his children, protect, but yet let his children grow to be their own person. Not to be over protected, but yet that child knows Dad is always there to help me improve.
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this was really good. I hope you always are the wonderful father you are now. A lot of children aren't lucky enough to have a father like yourself. Never change the way you are! Great Job!
    ~Kelly~
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by MurphyGirl44 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellent. If my son's father had these beliefs then well... maybe my son would be able to know him. It's good to see that there are good men out there not willing to just "Step Up" But to truly love their children the way that they wanted or were loved.
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by kriley6497 | [ Reply to This ]
      "No matter the obstacles, the setbacks, the futility,
    Love is the key.
    Learn to love and child rearing is easy."

    This was a great piece on your joys and observations of being a man in fatherhood and a father to your child.

    I enjoyed it and hope you too are enjoying the addition of family and you and your new wife are still honeymooning! Love,Peace,Joy! epiph ; }
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      A lovely and heartfelt write...and certainly true when it comes to being a parent. I could feel your emotion (as well as mine) while reading this.
    I think sometimes we do try too hard...especially with our first. Then we learn that we have to give them room to grow into their own.
    Nicely written words here.
    Take care,
    ~ Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Shit, there's nothing wrong with this, Dave, it just about says it all.
    I'm wondering where it should be, probably on the front inside flap of a parenting book?

    Bloody good! I can't critique this!

    be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      how sweet. when you wrote this you just became a father didnt you. i liked the way you wrote this you realy can feel the emotion.
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      Ben - This is truly beautiful a full of wisdom. I agree with your sentiments about fatherhood which takes a great deal of care, energy, love and strength. Not just paying the bills coming home and reading the paper or playing with the remote all night.

    If you get a chance read "Fathers Day 05" You may find it close to your feelings.

    Loved this!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]


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