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    dots Submission Name: Cherry Reddots

    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.61 - 29/18/23
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 985
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Snapshots of life.
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    dotsCherry Reddots

    "I only want you to love me";
    she said,
    eyes and lips;
    cherry red

    He stared for a moment,
    walked out the door;
    stepped on her heart,
    strewn on the floor

    And there she lie,
    face to the wood;
    waxy eyes fixed,
    where he last stood

    "I only wanted you to love me";
    she said
    Wiping the river from her chin;
    cherry red

    Submitted on 2005-07-03 21:42:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey, i like this poem! I like how you say "wiping the river from her chin" and "waxy eyes." god write!!!

    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful, I love it. It gets the moment across without anything getting in the way. You have a clear description and a defined moment, I really do like this one a lot; you did very well.

    Heroes don't die this well.
    | Posted on 2005-07-03 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]

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