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Farewell Note


Author: star_on_fire22
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comment and tell me if this is good or bad, please?


Farewell Note



why do your word echo in my head?
why cant you leave me alone?
youve hurt me enough,
i cant stand it any more.
if i do die by my own hand,
know its because of you.
i fucking hate you,
yet i love you so much it hurts.
i cry almost everyday
and you dont even know
you dont know the pain i go through just looking at you
as each day passes my heart disinegrates more,
and soon it will be gone
and i will be empty
dont ever tell me those words unless you mean them.
i believed you that day on the rock,
but i was a fool.
cause this is all a game to you
and you will say anything just to get what you want.
i fucking love you,
but you dont feel the same
i must die.
i cant live without you or your love
so this is my good bye.




Submitted on 2005-07-04 00:43:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It was well written. You have some spelling errors but thats about it. I just have one piece of advice for you. If he doesnt love you, if he just wants a certain "thing" from you...he isnt worth dieing over...you will soon enough move on and find someone else, that will make this douche bag seem more like the nothing he is. Well talk to you later
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Jessy
| Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
  Its good but it just pretty much tells everything just spiting it out with nothing to back it up. You know what i mean. Maybe some more little add ons would help.

Roguex
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by Roguex | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a typical angry poem. its more like a story. good message, but better detail, organization and usage of metaphors should be used.

liz
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by blndeliz | [ Reply to This ]


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