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    dots Submission Name: Queen Anne's Lacedots
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    Author: greensnake
    ASL Info:    60/female/ N.C.
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 770/691/75
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
    Total Views: 1436
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    Bytes: 84



    Description:
       Queen Anne's Lace is a tall white, lacy wild flower/weed (point of view) that grows in the roadside ditches and any weedy patch. I have always loved them and cut them to bring into the house at times. I am never sure just what constitutes a weed.


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    dotsQueen Anne's Lacedots
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    In the roadside grass
    Royalty bows her head low
    To greet her subjects.




    Submitted on 2005-07-04 02:03:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a great Haiku poem. It is so beautifully crafted. It takes a lot of thought to conduct a haiku. The first line is in five syllables and the second seven. Then the last also in five. I can see you have a great open mind. Keep up the great work and continue to write.
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with your stackload of commenters already and say that I thought this was a marvellous haiku too.

    I like the way your title tells us what you are talking about specifically. And I can actually see this flower in my head regally bending her head down like you stated with such astounding brevity. Which is the essence of a well-composed haiku to me.

    Just one small nitpick? Someone told me in a comment that haiku's aren't supposed to have enjambed lines. Not that I care as I have broken this rule myself but I was just wondering if you were aware of this?

    If you do want to end-stop the lines more I would suggest changing 'to greet' to 'greeting' which would fix it. But it's just a really small nitpick... up to you of course.

    With that said, I really did enjoy this one. Thank you.

    And peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      I love Queen Ann's Lace ( and Goldenrod, Campanula, Columbines-lol) and thought you captured the "nature" of this regal "weed" quite well. It does bow gracefully, and is taller tham most of the flowers around it, so could I can see quite easily that she "reigns" over the other wildflowers and grasses.
    Nice
    Sally
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure what constitutes a weed either but I have found some flowers (weeds) growing wild that I thought were really pretty.
    Very good write Lynn,
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      i bow my head to your haiku my friend. ..
    i too am never quite sure about what constitutes a weed. i love dandelions and anything else that grows free from the ground. i love the royal tone of this, can actually see the Queen Anne's Lace bow her head to the grass. haikus aren't as easy to write and i think you've done a marvelous job here. thank you for sharing.
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      What makes this haiku awesome,is that there's truth and love pouring all through it,which what I so love about this. Its amazing how certain plants just have a hold of your senes,for me it lilac's

    very good write
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice haiku, didn't really hit the spot for me but I'm sure you put alot of effort into it. Haiku's are hard...... I think I'm going to go write one now. Thanks for the inspiration
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooooooooo... haiku! Nicely done. The japanese poets of old would like it, as do I!

    Like to see more.

    as always, I am curiously...

    !n3pt
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by _n3pt | [ Reply to This ]
      Very neat indeed. Its a real talent packing such an image of grace into a haiku format, and you've succeeded admirably. Comrade Django salutes you.
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by Von Django | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! What a terrific haiku! NOthing per perfection (though come to think of it, I believe 'roadside' is one word-unless you meant to write it that way). Nice work here. :-)
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved it. I'm a sucker for haikus. They are so beautiful when well written. If you don't know and feel what a haiku represent, do not try to write one. In your case you, continue writing them. Simple, sweet and to the point yet tells it all. W e can picture a royal person, in a motorcade, bowing her head ever so lightly while acknowledging her subjects. Keep on writing them. Take care! wanda
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      I say, if it has a bloom, it's a flower
    This is a really nice description of this particular flower. I like the image it depicts. Royalty bowing her head to her subjects. It reminds me of Queen Elizabeth.. she's always so graceful when in public, with her pleasant wave and slight bow. It makes a lovely haiku. Happy 4th to You!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I admire the way you selected just the right words here. so creating the perfect structure with no wasted words at all. It takes skill and discipline to do this, yet you have made it look easy. I have not mastered haiku but I keep reading about them ... so perhaps one day!

    Your poem is lovely and so apt in describing these lacy wild carroty plants which nod in the wind. I like the tradition that haiku relates to nature so I can really appreciate it. thanks. J
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]


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