Description: Queen Anne's Lace is a tall white, lacy wild flower/weed (point of view) that grows in the roadside ditches and any weedy patch. I have always loved them and cut them to bring into the house at times. I am never sure just what constitutes a weed.
This is a great Haiku poem. It is so beautifully crafted. It takes a lot of thought to conduct a haiku. The first line is in five syllables and the second seven. Then the last also in five. I can see you have a great open mind. Keep up the great work and continue to write.
I have to agree with your stackload of commenters already and say that I thought this was a marvellous haiku too.
I like the way your title tells us what you are talking about specifically. And I can actually see this flower in my head regally bending her head down like you stated with such astounding brevity. Which is the essence of a well-composed haiku to me.
Just one small nitpick? Someone told me in a comment that haiku's aren't supposed to have enjambed lines. Not that I care as I have broken this rule myself but I was just wondering if you were aware of this?
If you do want to end-stop the lines more I would suggest changing 'to greet' to 'greeting' which would fix it. But it's just a really small nitpick... up to you of course.
With that said, I really did enjoy this one. Thank you.
I love Queen Ann's Lace ( and Goldenrod, Campanula, Columbines-lol) and thought you captured the "nature" of this regal "weed" quite well. It does bow gracefully, and is taller tham most of the flowers around it, so could I can see quite easily that she "reigns" over the other wildflowers and grasses. Nice Sally
i bow my head to your haiku my friend. .. i too am never quite sure about what constitutes a weed. i love dandelions and anything else that grows free from the ground. i love the royal tone of this, can actually see the Queen Anne's Lace bow her head to the grass. haikus aren't as easy to write and i think you've done a marvelous job here. thank you for sharing. !Cat
I loved it. I'm a sucker for haikus. They are so beautiful when well written. If you don't know and feel what a haiku represent, do not try to write one. In your case you, continue writing them. Simple, sweet and to the point yet tells it all. W e can picture a royal person, in a motorcade, bowing her head ever so lightly while acknowledging her subjects. Keep on writing them. Take care! wanda
I say, if it has a bloom, it's a flower This is a really nice description of this particular flower. I like the image it depicts. Royalty bowing her head to her subjects. It reminds me of Queen Elizabeth.. she's always so graceful when in public, with her pleasant wave and slight bow. It makes a lovely haiku. Happy 4th to You! ~Sandra
I admire the way you selected just the right words here. so creating the perfect structure with no wasted words at all. It takes skill and discipline to do this, yet you have made it look easy. I have not mastered haiku but I keep reading about them ... so perhaps one day!
Your poem is lovely and so apt in describing these lacy wild carroty plants which nod in the wind. I like the tradition that haiku relates to nature so I can really appreciate it. thanks. J