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    dots Submission Name: Heart to Bodydots
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    Author: Hidden_depths
    ASL Info:    20/F/England
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 37/34/11
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Prose/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 209
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 864



    Description:
       Ever had a broken heart? Thought you might die from it while you're lying in bed at night. Just though about it and this is what came. What d'you think? I wasn't quite sure on classification.


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    dotsHeart to Bodydots
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    'Just remember to breathe;
    Please keep breathing.
    It won't always be this bad.
    The dark will go away and it will stop hurting,
    It wont feel hollow forever.
    So just keep breathing, no matter how much it hurts.'

    'If it doesn't kill you it makes you stronger!
    I'll start to feel better soon.
    I'll be able to think straight and taste again;
    Then I'll start eating and stop smoking the pain away.
    It will get better so dont stop breathing.'

    'Its all for a reason and I must be living for one.
    So one breath at a time,
    It will come easier.
    It won't hurt much longer I promise,
    It can't!
    So from heart to body:
    I know I'm broken but please, please keep breathing!'




    Submitted on 2005-07-04 05:29:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It is a shame few people reviewed this write. I thought the notion of one part of the body encouraging (if not pleading) with another part to "hang in there" very imaginative. The personification really made this piece work while imparting an important message about perseverance and patience.

    Excellent work!
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]



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