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Be Yourself (Andrew's Poem)

Author: lenotoire
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Andrew was so excited to read all the comments on his poem that he decided to finish it. So here it is in its entirety.

I hope you all enjoy it.

Be Yourself (Andrew's Poem)


No matter how small you are,
you can still be a star,
Or, how nice or mean, or even bizarre
you can accomplish great things
without being known by everyone.
You may be able to be a wrestler
and lift a ton.
You could be big and mighty
without being tidy,
you could be richer than anyone,
but not be known by anyone.
But, you could be the best
and have lots of friends too.
You don't have to be a star to be the best,
you could just be who you are.

Andrew J. Budnik

Submitted on 2005-07-04 12:11:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  he should get his own elite skills account and start developing his talent... this is a terrific poem coming from the mind and hands of a ten year old!!
| Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by teenage_dirtbag | [ Reply to This ]
  This is awesome! Why doesn't andrew have his own page?! Three cheers for him!
Not only were the sentiments expressed admirable but also the way he expressed them. The language and the rhymes were right on target. Wish I knew some ten-year-olds who were half as talented!
Good for you Andrew!
| Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by cabbalistic | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok, so Andrew needs his own page! This is a great poem, and the fact that it came from a ten year old only makes it better! I hope that Andrew keeps writing, and we get to keep reading, because he has a great mind, and a wonderful way of sharing his thoughts. Thanks, so much, for letting us get to read this!

Keep up the good work! Now I want my ten year old to write something!
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a wonderful sentiment, and should be a compulsary read in schools.

It's amazing how we lose sight of the fact that, no matter who a person is, what a person has, or how much a person has achieved, they are, after all, still a person.

Thanks a bunch of flowers, this is great.

Be Happy
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  awesome the "no matter how small you are you can be a star" that is so wonderfully put. just those first two lines are the heart of altruism, the unselfish concern for others. With your encouragement Andrew will be a rising star in his own right. the accomplishments that people do without being known is another mind boggling statement, I'm blown away. the last two lines ca be literal and yet it also gives the hint of a lesson as well that no matter how tough things may get one can excel. this is so beautiful truly a divine piece. sincerely respectfully and with all encouragement for Andrew to keep on writing, mike :)
((pasted comments from the unfinished work to the complete work)) the lines you can be big and mighty without being tidy. I see myself especially in the not being tidy part. And another thing I get is people who are at the top in society have skeletons but they are just like everyone else they are human. I love that richer than anyone and not known. it also doubles again: being out of the spotlight and not having close friends. the last two lines are immortal in my eyes "You don't have to be a star to be the best, you could just be who you are." its a ground shaking statement with the emphasis (I place) on being yourself. rich, wise, and honest. it would hold up to any work as a fundamental truth. you are a blessed mother, sincerely mike :)
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]

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