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    Author: Anchiale
    ASL Info:    32/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 88/73/14
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1142
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 615



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       This is something my special friend and I created one night by taking turns creating lines...Just wanted to put it on here.


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    There's a new tenderoni in my life
    the kind you can bring home to momma or make your wife.
    The days go by, and it's hard to get any sleep
    without your love, my life is incomplete.

    Your warm smile and gracious looks
    have captivated me-I am shook.
    There's never been a love to make me feel the way you do,
    during the day and during the night, I comtemplate of you.

    I await by the phone, and when it rings, I know it is you,
    to hear your sexy voice, sends chills straight through.
    How lucky I am to have found you....




    Submitted on 2004-04-10 21:11:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is very sweet.... check back through it for a few grammatical errors here and there, though...
    -dandan
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      hey,liked the poem.found a good guuy it seems,stick with him.pretty cool poem,just watch for some careless typos (ie:chilss)
    | Posted on 2004-04-10 00:00:00 | by FaerieTale | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write, I personally dont agree with the whole love thing any more, glad you found a guy that can do that for you, I tried to do that for a girl once, but i guess love just isnt for me, and Im not going to become gay. Good job though.
    | Posted on 2004-04-10 00:00:00 | by wonderlug17 | [ Reply to This ]
      Love poems always seem to get to me..great write. it warms me up inside to think that there actually is a guy that can do all that to a girl still out there..I didnt think it was possible....and if it is possible..I tohught he already had a boyfriend...great write tho....Good to hear some happy poems
    | Posted on 2004-04-10 00:00:00 | by Cari Elise323 | [ Reply to This ]


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