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    dots Submission Name: Dreamsdots

    Author: patrick o_riley
    ASL Info:    16, male, ontario
    Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 70/91/25
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 908
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       Umm its kinda short and a bit happy. IT was a spurr of the moment it kinda just poped in my head!! hope you enjoy it!!

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    The sun it shines,
    Both bright and high.
    You can se the outlines,
    Of every cloud in the sky.

    Marionettes will play their games,
    Of trickery and illusion.
    You feel your heart surrounded by flames,
    And you feel much disillusion.

    The sun is setting all goes to sleep,
    In beds of warmth and good keep.
    While little ones will count there sheep,
    When all is silent not evin a peep.

    Your little ones will sleep and dream,
    Of fortune and good cheer.
    Of cakes and tarts all full with cream,
    No darkness is found here.

    Everyone of every age,
    Will sleep away tonight.
    Even those trapped in a cage,
    Will soon hear a sweet goodnight.

    Sleep away till morning comes,
    You'll feel refreshed and ready.
    Hear the beating of the drums,
    Your heart now beats steady.

    Submitted on 2005-07-04 13:31:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Make my day even happier...love hearing about people being happy! :D! Great reassurance for me to know that the rest of the world isn't always as miserable as it seems. The time could be taken out to correct a few spelling errors, though. Other than that, thanks for sharing! Very enjoyable.
    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by lorn_strixx | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such and uplifting poem and so happy. The flow was almost flawless and it was a very nice poem. This definately lifted my spirits for today. Great job and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by Starry Eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this and it was really happy. Nice images of peaceful sleep. Nothing beats a good nights rest, ya know? Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Kinda reminds me of christmas music. :) I like it. Like I said before you don't write like a 14 year old. There are a couple of typos, but other than that good job.
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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