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    dots Submission Name: Fallen Angel Chronicles IIdots

    Author: BrokenAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 179/157/47
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 963
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       Any comments are welcome. It's very late and I'm tired. (It just turned 1:00am) Thanks.

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    dotsFallen Angel Chronicles IIdots

    So many times have I walked past
    This once wide open door
    No more will I understand the facts
    As I fall to my floor

    A melody, a parody
    Of the life I play
    Why is it that only I can see
    That I'm not meant to stay

    Drowning out my fears and sorrows
    I wait only for my death
    No longer scared of the todays, the tomorrows
    Barely feeling this last breath

    A melody, a parady
    Of this game I play
    Why can't anybody see
    That I'm not here today

    Looking up into the mirror
    I see myself in red
    My confusing case of intrigue, of murder
    Sprawled across my bed

    The melody, the parady
    Of the things I say
    Through it all, I couldn't be
    In this world's dismay

    Submitted on 2005-07-04 23:07:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I would point out the fact that parody is spelt incorrectly, but...I just did, nevermind.

    Very powerful. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn. This one is more powerfull than the first. And the words here sound like magick. The over all tone stays the same but still hits the reader hard. And damn does this sound exactly how i feel right now. Great work. I love it. Another one for the favs.
    | Posted on 2005-07-19 00:00:00 | by Di Re Rakord | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey girlie! This is really good britt and I just read it. We both think its good and like all of your others a little creepy :). Well I'm off to read that other one so C'ya!

    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by kp_2007 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it a bliss of a poem, something I would write! I like the whole concept and the story and heart felt lines! I like the first & second stanza keep up the good work peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]

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