lonely, that's what I've been
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I hate the last line of this poem but I couldn't think of anything better so I'm open to suggestions
lonely, that's what I've been
In the end I am alone All has left And I don’t miss it either I relish my solitary existence I bask in the beauty of the quiet I’ll never go back It doesn’t matter anyway I’ll be dead soon enough Soon I’ll sleep and not wake up Sweet oblivion Loving eternity Peace, quiet, serene and overwhelming blackness Soon And all of you All of you ancient skeletons Forgotten days of madness Poorly concealed underneath the faded carpet in my basement Rotted lumps of flesh and dry bone All of you can’t come All of you will finally have to leave me alone ‘Cause I sent all of you straight to hell |
Submitted on 2005-07-04 23:46:21 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I don't really know...This was a vauge one...for me anyways. I get the general feeling of lonley and something on the borders of f it I don't care anymore, I give up. But I'm not entirely clear on everything...*shrugs* I did like a couple of lines singled out but, I don't know who the *all* is... is it other people of shadows of memories inside of you?| | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ] | I kind of agree with you about the last line... It kind of make sense cuz like you talk about skeletons and death and you know what i mean... but then the first thing i thought when i start to read this was "a hate love poem" but as soon as i finished... it wasn't love. i really don't know what to put down as for the last line...i'm not thinking straight right now...hey maybe some one smarter than me can come up with something nice. keep your hope up, and great poem. | kay | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ] | |
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