Mad Gone Alice by MerryDeath

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Submission Name: Mad Gone Alice dots

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Author:	MerryDeath
ASL Info:	20/f/Ohio
Elite Ratio:	4.49 - 348/355/70
Words:	112

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	314
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	967

Description:
WARNING: ONLY READ THE DESCRIPTION IF YOU DO NOT UNDERSTAND!

Going on the premise of Lewis Carroll's opium habit actually bringing his imagined character to life- I thought it was nifty...

Mad Gone Alice dots

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Crying Alice weaves and wanders
Crazed by acid dreams that haunt her
No rabbits left for her to ponder
"Child, your apron strings are loose!"

Broken Alice talks and mumbles
She barely walks without a stumble
The opium caused her mind to jumble
"Child, just take a look at yourself!"

{Pretty Alice, pretty no more
Alice turned into a whore
To fuck away that keyless door
"Child, you're talking to a tree!"

Years ago, her author passed
Granting her the will to last
Unto her, his spell's been cast
"Child, watch out for that hole!"

Submitted on 2005-07-05 04:20:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
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||| Comments |||
  hey, what's up, me?
great poem, me!
i'm a fantastic writer!
go me! go me!
~ll~
| Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by laudanumlips | [ Reply to This ]
  Very beautiful and haunting. I am very found of Alice stories. She described little Alice quite well in there, you gave her life and I could just see her falling. Great piece, I very much enjoyed it <3
| Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Viol3t | [ Reply to This ]
  Weird? Random?Confusing? Are these people even bothering to soak up this piece?

CONGRADS! GREAT WRITE! amazing piece. You have a gift there and it is reflected in imagination that jumps from one line to the next saying exactly what ALICE really was all about. YOu gifted in the art of taking everyday language and making a piece that is humorous and poetic at the same time...I humbly ask your permission to reproduce this piece for my fridge magnets to have an eye catcher<Wink>
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by sunnysideup | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeh slightly confused by this although it's written really lovely- like the rhythm and rhyme.
As i said, confused by what your trying to say although had a slight idea but still enjoyed the read and it is still enjoyable with a little mystery behind it xxxx
callyxxxx
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by callycat | [ Reply to This ]
  this is kinda cool... weird and random but kinda cool all the same...

i like the italicized last lines of stanzas and how they are spoken...
i especially like the first one "child your apron strings are loose" which sounds like a warning in some ways but also a prompt to encourage investigating... one cannot explore if mummy is always there barking/nagging instructions and saftey warnings...

so this is what... lewis carol and alice from wonderland tripping together? hmmmm... kinda crazy but still cool...

oh ok... so your description answers my suspicions... ha awesome.

i really like how the third stanza has shrunk... kinda like alice shrinks in the story... (i guess that was purposeful and i am being captain obvious in stating so...)

cool write.
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  I have no idea what your poem is suppose mean. Of course, I understand who Alice is, who Carroll is, but why in the world did Alice become a door-[censored] whore? Maybe you could tell me what exactly your poem is supposed to mean.

ONe guess though, is it something to do with the parallels between Carroll's addiction, and the dream-like fantasy of Alice in Wonderland?

Sebby
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Sebby | [ Reply to This ]
  i still enjoy your writings this is exactly like alice in wonderland with a different name :D loving it<3 (sorry for no decent feedback, i'm in hurry)
| Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by _taateli_ | [ Reply to This ]

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