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    dots Submission Name: Secrete relationshipsdots
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    Author: Babykatty
    ASL Info:    18/f/mass
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 43/54/49
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 251
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    Bytes: 1807



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    dotsSecrete relationshipsdots
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    She believes his words
    Even though she knows it’s wrong
    He wrapped her around his finger
    Well he used his other hand
    to play with the others

    Her eyes study his movements
    As he flirts and mingles
    She wonder what he’s thinking
    Wither or not he knows it hurts
    He smiles at her, well he flirts once more

    Making it only worst
    This secret relationship isn’t working
    It makes her want to scream
    Want to just tell them to back off
    Yet she’s stuck in a world where nothing is true

    Her friends begin to notice
    And slowly begin to ask one by one
    They all know she lies
    Yet they go along
    She can’t vent
    Or even rant

    For no one is suppose to know
    This locked up heart could remove itself
    Yet she doesn’t want to leave
    She wants his love and comfort
    Even if it is just in secret

    She asks herself questions
    As her mind runs back and fourth
    Like a puppy being taunted with meat
    Moving from one side of the room to the other
    Only to end up empty handed
    With no answers at all

    She looks over at him once more and studied him again
    She knows she shouldn’t be thinking wrongly
    For it’s just innocent flirting
    Nothing more, nothing less…right?

    Yet she still wants to yell at him
    Instead she gives him a light smile
    And just looks on the ground
    That’s where her feelings would stay

    Within the ground,
    buried under everything
    Kept away from everyone
    Just like the two of them









    Submitted on 2005-07-05 15:27:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      your content was great, your flow was great, your rhythm was great, but please. PLEASE look into spell check. you lost all your impact because i couldnt understand some things.
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good. Reality hurts. I knew someone in a situation like that. It went on 25 yrs. Started when she was 18. She still didn't get him after all those years. He lied and she cried. She gave up her life for his beck and call. Finally, at age 43 she decided enough. But look all the sacrafices she made for him. He stayed with his wife. That was plan all along. He had a secret lover and a wife and family. My friend had a married man who lied to her from day one. Good job! wanda
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. I know what you mean. Although I can't exactly relate completely, I understand what you're saying. I like the way it was worded. My favorite part was the end:

    "Yet she still wants to yell at him
    Instead she gives him a light smile
    And just looks on the ground
    That’s where her feelings would stay

    Within the ground,
    buried under everything
    Kept away from everyone
    Just like the two of them"

    I like this a lot. Great job :-)

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      i understand what ur saying actually this has happend bouth with me and a friend and its happing again. i liked the part bout a puppy beging taunted by meat. it looks to me that there a like a cupple spelling mistakes but im not so shur. it was good.
    | Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]



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