War? by Nirvana

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Author:	Nirvana
ASL Info:	13/f/USA
Elite Ratio:	3.72 - 138/204/63
Words:	121

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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War?

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I dont know whats worth fighting for
But I know why all those people cried
Mothers, Fathers, Siblings, Children
Were weeping because their soldiers died

I wept for a different reason
I had no soldier that i could cry over
I shed my tears for war
I cried not because of the soldiers, but what they were dying for

Do we need to fight to live
Do we need to die? (like this)
Do bombs, guns, death
really have to be a part of us?

We say we were fighting for a good cause
But when other countries were in real need
When bombs were in the air
When they needed us the most
Were we ever there?

Submitted on 2005-07-05 19:20:51 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow., You really suprised me.I was just looking at this other poem when i noticed your name.Well thank goodness i did.you are amazing.this could almost be a song.i love the flow sooooooooooooo much.im adding you to my stalkin list.amazing.,brilliant.
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah! Nicely spoken and deeply felt, I could feel that much. If you've taken flak for this poem, take it as a compliment. At least you've made people feel something and think about it and drawn attention to the subject.

Your style is direct and almost childlike and yet I found this worked for me. When most political or war poems get so convoluted you've just sliced through all that complexity and given us the straight dope, as it were.

Your last question begs an answer and being something of a history buff, I'd have to say, yeah, we've been there for others and maybe now it doesn't look that way, or it's difficult to see it clearly, but in the end <though this in no way justifies the horrors of war> war tends to be a cleansing affair and perhaps good can come out of great evil. I don't know if what's going on in Iraq is right, and my heart strains against the idea that it might be, but I have to believe something good will come of all of it and that those soldiers didn't give their lives in a vain pursuit of profit margins.

As a former Marine, I salute you.
| Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, massive amount of comments. Congrats.

Great poem. The best poems say something about the person who wrote them. This one tells me that you are a good honest person who looks at everything from different views. Your probably quite sensitive and caring. Good on you:).

You looked at many different aspects such as the other views around you and the people with those views, you talked of the soldiers and their cause, and you told of yourself. At the end you wrapped it up with a nice little conclusion.
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by Arrowcat | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is VERY true... however... death is unavoidable... war is anavoidable... disagreements happen... no matter what... as far as wether you agree or not... is a different matter... i do not like fighting... and i do not like war... death i love... without it... the world would be over crowded... and beleive it or not... the older you get... the less you can take care of yourself... so after a while... it would start to get really painful... etc... but that is sidetracking... i agree with your poem in parts... but i think they should use dignity when fighting... because fighting is unavoidable... enjoy
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Esophagus1 | [ Reply to This ]
  That's a very good poem, I especially like the last stanza. Personally I don't think the soldiers of America are bad at all. I've got some friends in the war that just want to help. As long as Bush doesn't intervene with anything too rash, I'm sure they'll do all they can from beginning to end just like they have been.

Unfortunately war continues whether or not we like it. I mean, think about it. Siblings fight all the time in their own home. Doesn't it make sense that on this earth with billions of other people everywhere, we would be doomed family feuds since the time of Adam & Eve?
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by Chihuahuii | [ Reply to This ]
  This was good and full of emotions of questioning what some think is a valiant cause while others see it as useless violence. War is a difficult subject to find an answer too. All I feel is that policing the world is a difficult task that has to be intricately done...yet no matter how delicate someone is, someone always sees it as being done in some different light. Like these bombs you speak of...people got all upset that in previous uses of them, they killed "innocent bystanders", so the govt spends who knows how many billions of dollars inventing those "smart bombs" and the enemy adapted to that, by placing "strategic military stuff" near schools, public places...ya know? No matter how delicate the "police" are...the criminals always find a way to adapt to it...so the cops and robbers are always chasing each others tails. Anyway, just rambling...

The soldiers die to protect you and I, that is why we have the 4th of July, and I am sure they appreciate your tears ma dear. Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Way mature for your age i agree, in a society that has been blinded by the right for several years now. IT is a breath of fresh air to here someone so young talk about something that most ppl havnt even come to realize, and that is that we are in ficticious society, that is steam rolling towards world domination. I may sound like a concpirator but its true. Good write, i thought that the structure was ok, maybe if it was choppier you could see your frustration a little bit better. Just a sugestion though.
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by xXxNichexXx | [ Reply to This ]
  *opens eyes wide* Are you sure your 13. lol. You seem so advaced for your age. You have a great talent going for you. This was a greally good poem. You ask so many good questions. Maybe we all need to lay back on them...and answer them ourselves...ya know what i'm saying. I really like the last stanza...man if that isn't the truth ya know.

I cried not because of the soldiers, but what they were dying for

I really liked that line. That is so truthful.

God bless America!!!

Much love to ya
Mikki**
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
  your a very good poet from the poems I've read so far, really good... I really like this poem-it asks so many questions that I think as a nation we've forgotten to ask ourselves...thank-you for such an awesome write

very good
-stacey-
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]
  your poem was great, and im not trying to down your views, just adding a few of my own. ive talked to some people living in iraq. they love americans. most of them LOVE americans. they believe that we are there to help. it was choppy until we got saddaam...but now they believe we are doing everything in our powers. they know that we are not killing citizens, they understand the opposition is killing more civilians. and also, if we werent in iraq, if we left saddaam in power, BILLIONS would be dead compared to the hundreds of thousands killed during the war. (i mean civilians, not opposition soldiers) so its a double edged blade. yes, its bad that all these civilians are dying, but yes more would die if we werent there. just my views. its a beautiful thing that we can openly speak out against and for our country's actions BOTH and have no repercussions against us, you know? god save free speech. god bless america.
| Posted on 2005-07-05 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
  im not saying im not sad for the soldiers and im not saying i hate them and this doesnt refer to the current war. THIS IS IN GENERAL, PEOPLE! lol. i am sad for the lives that are lost, soldier and enemy alike. i could never be a soldier. i couldnt take the life of another person, you know?
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by Nirvana | [ Reply to This ]

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