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    dots Submission Name: Rosesdots
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    Author: greensnake
    ASL Info:    60/female/ N.C.
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 770/691/75
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Haiku/Friendship
    Total Views: 985
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 84



    Description:
       I awoke to a vase of roses this morning and knew that my neighbor had been here in the night to leave me a present from her garden. What a wonderful gift. What a wonderful awakening.


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    Roses on my porch
    When I awoke this morning
    Friends came in the night.




    Submitted on 2005-07-06 00:56:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love roses! You say your neighbor left em for you...that was really nice of her. You referred to it as Friends came in the night. I know you meant the friends was your neighbor, but it could also mean that the roses had bloomed out overnight...so that makes it fit just that much better.
    We have some wonderful neighbors too, but I see Doc has already told you that.
    DJ
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      I would say what a wonderful neighbor! I mean I have good neighbors that will help me do just about anything, but they ain't left me no roses yet!
    You're so lucky!
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      This is haiku is so sweet. Other than sweet, its great that you still think about your frineds.. How touching..
    Great haiku

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm...I don't really know if i do like this. It really didn't say all that much. It is as if you said the poem in your description. I'm not really into hikuas that much so maybe that is why it really doesn't interst me. But you much have a very nice neighbor/friend. I do admit...this is sweet. But not much more i can really say.


    Mikki
    x3
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a sweet little thing. Like it a lot. You've got very nice friends, I guess.

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    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this haiku a lttle more than your previous one. It's getting better, but I dunno, I didn't really like the last line because I was hearing your story, and then all of a sudden it jumps to the end of the day. Pretty good though, 4/5
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was a really good Haiku. You should try to add a tad bit more imagery though. It would really bring out this piece.
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by Lipgl0ssed | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how you say so much with so few lines. A good Haiku, I would enjoy seeing you develop this skill. Could be a little more mystical though.
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by Arrowcat | [ Reply to This ]
      dont think this is a poem as such

    it could be... but three lines isn't bunch

    it would be different if they blow you away

    but your not saying much

    just a senctence with line breaks

    There were roses on my porch when I awoke this morning, friends came in the night. i felt awakward holding them, dizzy with the fragrance.

    a story maybe?

    i dont know

    it needs more to be something

    on the flipside
    -DS
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by playing card | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww! That is so sweet! You really have a special friend! And it is twice as nice as she grew them herself! What a nice way to start the day! Take care.
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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