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A Faraway Land

Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
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Words: 114
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just something I wrote a few minutes ago...

A Faraway Land

In a distant, far-off land
Somewhere peaceful, somewhere new
There I'll live another day
Wishing fairytales came true

There the gnomes come out to play
From their little forest homes
Whistling tunes of summer rain
Smiling smiles of happy gnomes

Fairies with translucent wings
Dancing gaily in the air
Bounding lightly on gold leaves
Sparkles shimmer in their hair

Mermaids dwell in deep green lakes
Strung with pearls of pink and white
Swimming through their water world
With an air of sheer delight

In this place of kings and elves
In this land where centaurs roam
I shall live somehow, someday
Oh, to call such a place home!

Submitted on 2005-07-06 13:36:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is beautiful and wistful.
I've always enjoyed fairytales and stories about elves and mermaids and what have you..
the imagery is vivid, I can see what you are painting before my eyes.

'gnomes come out to play
From their little forest homes
Whistling tunes..'
'Bounding lightly on gold leaves
Sparkles shimmer in their hair'
'deep green lakes
Strung with pearls of pink and white'


thanks for the read.

| Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a happy poem. Can I visit your fantasy with you? We can watch the gnomes play together.

I really loved the imagery in this. Fairies with sparkling, shimmering hair. I could see them playing on leaves of gold.

Thank you for sharing such a happy fantasy with us.

Brightest Blessings,
p.s. When do we leave?
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
  Yea, i wish for the same thing! It reminds me of a fairytale...well duh, lol. I'd have to say that THIS is my favorite part:

Mermaids dwell in deep green lakes
Strung with pearls of pink and white
Swimming through their water world
With an air of sheer delight

This is a very fanstasy-ish poem. Which is good becuz everyone has their own fantasy! I like the whole layout of the poem and the stanza's were awesome. I really liked the imagery in this too. Great piece and i look forward to read more from you.

| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by _NowOrNever_ | [ Reply to This ]
  This is quite a air lifting poem-I mean it's not everyday that I read such a poem of dreams, and fairytales and you know it's nice to know that someone dreams of their home in a fairytale-I remember when i was younger I use to dream the same dream as you-now I just dream that I could live in the forest, me and them w/ the creatures to accompany-your piece is a beautiful piece...I'm quite glad i came across it...
nice job
thank you for a wonderful share
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]
  aww i love these kindsa poems... they always have such a peaceful kind of air about them... you did a great job on this one... The rhyme was unforced and it flowed together so well... Fairytales were meant to come true, if not phyically then through the feelings emitted from such poetry as this... you've done very well in this my friend, truely... take care of yourself and don't let the gnomes gnaw at your knees... stomp on um if they do... ADIOS!

Travis Thomas John Rickett
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, to live in a land where fairies braid flowers into our hair. To watch the elves glide over the tips of ferns, and unicorns play with their young. I am packed and ready to go! The lack of punctuation didn't deter from this piece; it is a piece of fantasy where the rules of our world don't apply.
Thanks for posting this beautiful little piece! I needed a bit of wonder today.
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
  i think everyone dreams of a fantastic place to take the rest of their life away, because life isn't constantly beautiful or the dream we wish it to be.
such a pretty place comes to mind and i like the fact there this piece is full with joy - but then the longing at the end
'Oh, to call such a place home!'
gives realisation that the world is not such a place which is quite sad in a way ! -beautiful images xxx cheers
cally xxx
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by callycat | [ Reply to This ]
  This is neat, tidy and contains an air of happiness about it that made me smile while reading it. The rhyming sceme also kept a constant pace throughout and fitted in almost to perfection. The vision that you describe, you done it in such a way that i could invision it as i read through the piece. Only one thing i can see that i think could be a typo, however if you meant to be this way, then this a suggestion..

Dancing joyfully in air

I think adding 'the' would of gone better with it's rhyming partner.
Like so;

Dancing joyfully in the air
Sparkles shimmer in their hair

If you put the two together like this you can see what i mean, they now are roughly the same length.
Also it lacks punchuation, but i only saw that as i pasted those lines and took nothing away from the read at.
A happy and vision filled piece.
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by corruptedspirit | [ Reply to This ]

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