Yea, i wish for the same thing! It reminds me of a fairytale...well duh, lol. I'd have to say that THIS is my favorite part:
Mermaids dwell in deep green lakes Strung with pearls of pink and white Swimming through their water world With an air of sheer delight
This is a very fanstasy-ish poem. Which is good becuz everyone has their own fantasy! I like the whole layout of the poem and the stanza's were awesome. I really liked the imagery in this too. Great piece and i look forward to read more from you.
This is quite a air lifting poem-I mean it's not everyday that I read such a poem of dreams, and fairytales and you know it's nice to know that someone dreams of their home in a fairytale-I remember when i was younger I use to dream the same dream as you-now I just dream that I could live in the forest, me and them w/ the creatures to accompany-your piece is a beautiful piece...I'm quite glad i came across it... nice job thank you for a wonderful share -stacey-
aww i love these kindsa poems... they always have such a peaceful kind of air about them... you did a great job on this one... The rhyme was unforced and it flowed together so well... Fairytales were meant to come true, if not phyically then through the feelings emitted from such poetry as this... you've done very well in this my friend, truely... take care of yourself and don't let the gnomes gnaw at your knees... stomp on um if they do... ADIOS!
Oh, to live in a land where fairies braid flowers into our hair. To watch the elves glide over the tips of ferns, and unicorns play with their young. I am packed and ready to go! The lack of punctuation didn't deter from this piece; it is a piece of fantasy where the rules of our world don't apply. Thanks for posting this beautiful little piece! I needed a bit of wonder today. -Chell-
i think everyone dreams of a fantastic place to take the rest of their life away, because life isn't constantly beautiful or the dream we wish it to be. such a pretty place comes to mind and i like the fact there this piece is full with joy - but then the longing at the end 'Oh, to call such a place home!' gives realisation that the world is not such a place which is quite sad in a way ! -beautiful images xxx cheers cally xxx
This is neat, tidy and contains an air of happiness about it that made me smile while reading it. The rhyming sceme also kept a constant pace throughout and fitted in almost to perfection. The vision that you describe, you done it in such a way that i could invision it as i read through the piece. Only one thing i can see that i think could be a typo, however if you meant to be this way, then this a suggestion..
Dancing joyfully in air
I think adding 'the' would of gone better with it's rhyming partner. Like so;
Dancing joyfully in the air Sparkles shimmer in their hair
If you put the two together like this you can see what i mean, they now are roughly the same length. Also it lacks punchuation, but i only saw that as i pasted those lines and took nothing away from the read at. A happy and vision filled piece. Danny