Description: this one is all over the place but i am stuck on it, please help.
Knives of guilt -------------------------------------------
These knives of guilt,
They keep me alive at night
Gutting my insides
Till I resemble
The nothing I want
My judgment lingers on your heart
And I memorize it
So maybe I’ll have a good dream tonight
Your screams echo in my head
So full of empty thoughts
I think I love you
Or maybe not
These feelings are too strong for you
They won’t disintegrate
So I’ll drown in these tears
And hope in this twilight sky
You see the same stars
To remind you to think of me
Ok. Ill start with the first verse, To me, it seemed out of place with the rest. Maby because I find no explination of guilt. Nothing to tie the rest together. In itself,the verse could be teh beginning to something elts compleatly.. something direceted souly atyourself. to me it reminded me wholely on image as mutilation to stop the feeling.maby not 2nd verse. It was alright but i wonder how your judgement on anothers heart can be memorized for sweet dreams. 3rd Did I read sarcasm! I liked that! 4thit had a bittersweet kinda feeling... All in all it was decent.. I just couldn't realy tie in the first verse to this piece. Maby that will help you some?
Submission Name: Knives of guilt
