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    dots Submission Name: Music in the Airdots
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    Author: Quin
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    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMusic in the Airdots
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    There is music in the air.
    I hear it, smell it, taste it.
    There is no other sound,
    Against the drumming beat.
    The wind blows in sweet harmony,
    And catches it's breath
    On the edge of the clouds
    And dives down into the depths of the land
    Whistling, roaring, tumbling down from heaven.
    Flying to the rhythm of the music in the air.


    Across the land, the rhythm wakes
    The forest, the land and streams.
    Raindrops glisten silver,
    And fall from the outreaching leaves.
    They gather in the moonlight;
    So soft, so fair.
    Falling to the rhythm of the music in the air.


    The beat reaches the mountain tops
    High above and down below.
    It wakes a spirit in the chasm gold,
    That churns its way to the surface.
    Red hot, liquid flame, burning through the air,
    Unstoppable.
    But still flaming to the rhythm of the music in the air.





    Submitted on 2004-04-11 01:23:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Have you seen August Rush? If you haven't, I suggest you do, since this poem is the theme in that movie. It's quite a beautiful story, if you hear the music, as it's obvious from this poem you do. :)

    And that's the most important thing, I think. As long as you continue to hear it (it's everywhere), and love it enough that you will even fight to continue hearing it, then I'd say you're a pretty strong person, and a better writer/composer/artist/etc. for it.

    Watch the movie if you haven't.


    I think the element of sound would make this more multidimensional than it already is, and the options are limitless. I'm not sure how good you are with software that allows you to play around with music and sound effects and the like. Believe me, I can hear the words perfectly well, but to let this go deeper into that magical realm where anything is possible . . .


    You remind me of someone on here. EmpathicAya. Her spirit is wonderful, just like yours seems to be.


    A slight error in the first strophe: it's should be its.


    Watch August Rush! Even the opening scene will have you connect.

    Alia
    | Posted on 2009-05-16 00:00:00 | by O | [ Reply to This ]
      I closed my eyes for a moment while reading and saw myself flying far above mountains and valleys! Surreal but nice :)
    | Posted on 2004-04-11 00:00:00 | by caspian | [ Reply to This ]
      Not just you cuddle, i saw it too, Typos are blah. But its Lovely, I like the imagry you put into it, you can see the music flowing around the places you describe. Mine was about music...its called "Dirty Sock" go lookie!! ::nod nod:: true story! Loved this! ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-11 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty good. There's some nice imagery. I think I'd put a comma between "So soft so fair," but that's just me.
    | Posted on 2004-04-11 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great, you make an awesome mix between emotional describing and then realistic describing. I enjoyed this alot--- I know many an afternoon I've felt this way outside!
    | Posted on 2004-04-27 00:00:00 | by mixedemotions00 | [ Reply to This ]


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