Fear of Disappearing by rocknpoetrychik

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Submission Name: Fear of Disappearing dots

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Author:	rocknpoetrychik
ASL Info:	20/Female/Someplace
Elite Ratio:	4.06 - 331/281/44
Words:	71

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	307
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	496

Description:
growing up sucks ass.. realizing you are attractive to the opposite sex is strange.. i have had it sporadically in the past but now it is like people are coming out of the woodwork.. so strange. bills.. ugh.. bitchy people at work sucks.

Fear of Disappearing dots

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Life, once so simple,
Playing all day, no cares,
Now entertwined yet disconnected,
Floating from one hell to another,
Bills, Bitches, Boys,
Grasping for pennies,
Beat down by bad attitudes,
Running away from unknown attention,
YELL, YELL, YELL,
Ringing in my ears,
Deaf to what is being related,
Pounding from the inside,
Screaming from the core,
If I do not let this out,
I fear I will be no more

Submitted on 2005-07-06 17:20:27 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  bills, [censored]es and boys! the bane of my existence as well! you won't disappear though-you'll come back stronger. it doesn't seem that way at first but you'll see later on. I like this write too-it's more gentle but has something to say that many of us feel and can relate to. life can be a drag. but it's not all bad! I figure it's all in how you react to it. you can choose to let it bother you, or not. makes it easier that way! I enjoyed this poem too!
| Posted on 2005-07-28 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
  im not much of the critique type, i mostly like to read and express how it made me feel, or share my relations to the peice so dont get mad at me for not being a critique, now with that out of the way...

Im 21 now dealing with all the bills, i think thats the part in your write the stuck with me was the bills, i have some debt, not alot, but it prevents me from doing what i would like sometimes,lifes never really been fun for me, you have read my poems, you know, anyways now that i have to be financialy responcible for myself, it even harder to deal with things, being grown up is hard, especially when you started being grown up when you where just a kid, well i will just say on remark to your poem it was good, well written and delivered a message that can be related...
| Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by fallenone | [ Reply to This ]
  I like all your choice of words here.
At first read it just seems like a bit of a random thought/rant thingy, but on further reads you have actually put some work into this.
The more I read it, the more I like it!

Well done, you gotta let it out, and you did it well...

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  the beauty of writing, to let out those feelings that threaten to devour us from the inside out.. "i fear that i shall disappear and no one will have the key to find me..."
life does seem to get a bit more complicated when we grow older and have to face paying bills and dealing with the everyday stress of being in this crazy mixed up world, trying to be sane in an insane world.
thanks for sharing.
@ Cat
| Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  In a fatalistic way you got your point across. I get the impression you're where everyone else has been or will be, and you've found very little honesty along the way to shore yourself up. Maybe you need someone to really listen. What you've written sounds like teen angst with an edge. Keep writing and apply the same fire to a more positive subject.
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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