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    dots Submission Name: She's leaving Virginiadots
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    Author: Lies
    ASL Info:    18/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 56/31/6
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsShe's leaving Virginiadots
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    She's always wanting things she can't have.
    Always dreaming of things she's never get.
    She's tired of being someone's property.
    She's never known the feeling of just being free.

    She's hitting the road.
    She's going on her own.
    She's leaving Virginia.
    After all that's what she wants to do.
    Yeah, leaving Virginia,
    forgetting about you.

    Leaving behind memories trapped in stone.
    By the time she returns, she hopes they'll be gone.
    She's leaving Virginia; she's leaving home.
    she's leaving Virginia; trying to make it on her own.
    She's leaving Virginia, forget about her.
    She's leaving Virginia.....




    Submitted on 2005-07-06 18:20:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this poem a lot...
    The repitition worked well in this poem (Which doesn't happen often)

    Very good job with this poem The only problem I see with this is 'Always dreaming of things she's never get.'
    Is it supposed to say that or is it a typo...it doesn't really make sense..ya know?
    Very good job..

    ...jessie
    | Posted on 2005-11-15 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminded me of a Sheryl Crow or Tracy Chapman type song - just the flow.
    This sounded like a personal experience about a woman who just wanted to see life from another view point and separate herself from memories and make some new ones.
    Good job!
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      virginia is for lovers so they say
    virginia is for lovers but u went away
    virginia is for lovers and the games we play
    virginias on my mind all of the time
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by splifford | [ Reply to This ]


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