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    dots Submission Name: He is Beautifuldots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       THis is another poem about Cory...pretty boy. Is it enough to know I am pathetic?

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    dotsHe is Beautifuldots

    Cory smiles, did you see it?
    It was beautiful
    He wants to be a professional chef
    did you see it
    isn't that beautiful
    He takes pictures with his phone...pretty pictures
    did you see them
    they are beautiful

    Cory listens to my favorite bands
    Nirvana to be exact
    he sang a bit of Lithium
    did you hear it
    so fucking beautiful
    even with every flaw

    but sometimes he forgets to speak

    sometimes I can't call him or see him

    Cory said he could come see me today
    he's so beautiful

    Submitted on 2005-07-06 22:08:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I Like the poem for what it brings out in you ../. a grand light of good nature ../. the poem it self has small and sharp repeativeness in it and i think thats pretty cool. good job
    | Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      it's great that you think he's beautiful... but umm this write def. left me bored. sry. maybe a different choice of words would have made this a great piece.. but umm.. it seem juvenille..
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by sum12luv | [ Reply to This ]
      right...i dont understand this at all... wow. i am like really lost. but i liked the title! it really got me catched on to it. but then i kinda lost it in the poem. sry1
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]

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