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    dots Submission Name: a symbol for fundots
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    Author: EdwardScissorhands
    ASL Info:    22/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 88/104/37
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1220
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    Description:
       my friend ryan wrote this, and i loved it so much i had to post it for him:)


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    dotsa symbol for fundots
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    Some people travel
    And others play games
    Some people like movies
    While others find them lame

    From one to another
    Itís a different pick
    What defines a good time
    And what makes them tick.

    Some go the amusement parks
    While others stay home
    Some catch the Argos
    And Jays at the Dome.

    With all of these options
    Of what fun could be,
    Let me tell you what
    Symbolizes fun for me.

    I donít need to go out west
    Or see the Chinese
    I donít need to go to a beach
    And lay under Palm Trees.

    I donít need to play clue
    Rat Race or Monopoly
    And I could get by without
    Ever yelling Yahtzee

    I donít need to go out
    And see lots of flicks
    Watch someoneís life story,
    See what made them tick.

    I donít need to go
    To Canadaís Wonder Land
    Nor to Universal studioís
    Just because thereís sand

    I donít need to be surrounded
    By hot dogs and beer
    And Join in as the home team
    Gets a cheer.

    All of these activities
    Are ways to pass time
    With friends and family
    While youíre in your prime.

    Itís not the scenery, the lights
    Or who wins the race
    Itís who you are with
    When that moment takes place

    Although they could be added
    And would be nice too
    Fun for me isnít things,
    Itís spending time with you




    Submitted on 2005-07-06 22:21:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ow, Your friend wrote it :(... I thought you were the author, I'm sorry, well pass on the message please.

    Thank you,
    MrBear
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing lol, this poem is very good and I'm proud to be the first to comment on it. It's perfect, and I wouldn't change a thing. Wish this comment could be more useful then what it is right now, but I can't really say anything negative about the poem. Just encouragement would suffice. Great work and keep writing! The world needs an example like you. 5/5
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]


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