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    dots Submission Name: I Still Love Youdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is to my parents...they are in denial about alot fo shit...I need to get away from them for my own good but I wouldn't want them to think that I don't love them.


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    dotsI Still Love Youdots
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    To my mother

    I watch you watch him
    and I know you love him
    your heart is completely involved
    and he hurts you and I hate it
    the way he talks to you
    it's so bad
    it hurts so much
    but you let him

    and now you are losing yourself
    I thought he was your only addiction
    I guess he led you to this
    this stupid white shit you snort through your nose
    and your friends say that you have been heavy on it for two years
    are you fucking kidding me?
    Is that why I have been slowly losing you
    two FUCKING years...I don't know if I should be angry or sad

    but I still love you so much

    To my daddy

    I hear what you say to momma
    and I know you are frustrated
    but you make her love you and then you ripp her heart
    a million times a day
    an hour, a fucking second
    do you even really love her?
    I'm scared to know the truth
    and you too are on that shit...well I have known it all my life, I guess I just didn't see you slowly killing yourself...I guess my innocence kept me niave, but I am growing up now daddy
    and I'm not blind

    but I still love you




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      this peice of work SCREAMS with sadness / its very artful for you to throw your guts out on to paper in this work ../. the poem is of a great loss to many teenagers who do ... well have [censored]edup parents ../. i think alot of the youth today can read this peice and say to them self: i completely understand you lori !
    JWI
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      Powerful Rant.it Speaks.. its almost like you hear you talking. I love how you tell them you love them and tell them u desaprove of the wrong things.
    You will make a good mother if you have a family,i really enjoy this.
    Keep on Trucking.
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      So sad. I wanna cry. They're my parents too! I think if our mother read this, she might understand. Or she might just take some more drugs. It's so beautiful. It breaks my little heart
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really sad. I am sorry for you. I can only say that I hope things get better for you and your parents. Maybe they can find the strenght to stop what they are doing, but if not I agree with Joey, you should leave.
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      woo this is sharp really tells the person (your parents) straight and you should let your parents know how you feel if you haven't already done so - you shouldn't be whittnessing such pain as it inflicts pain onto you and i hopw you don't turn to the actions that your parents take to take away your trouble -don't let it influence you ! but as i see from the write you understand how stupid it is and that it's a dreadful action to take-so don't go there!
    i can really imagine someone in your possition saying this in an argument while crying or something like that and it saddens me to think that someone is going through this -
    i really hope you and your parents can sort something out ! xxx
    cally xxxx
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by callycat | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that must be hard. I agree with medicated when he/she said to should show this to your parents, but you shouldn't leave them.
    Sometimes, all that holds people from falling off the face of the earth, is love from others. Talk to you mom about how you feel about what's going on. Tell her your worried about her because you love her. Then talk to your dad and do the same.
    Suggest they get help, like marriage counselling and that. Do what you can to help them because if they see you're worried and that you care about them, they'll try to change. But whatever you do, make sure you tell them that you love them. If the problem gets worse, get some of your family involved, ask them to help.
    But whatever you do, don't run away. Good luck, I wish you the best.
    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, you shuld this 2 ur parents nd leave them and nvr go back, really jazz, you shuld leave there and u need to 2...well i did like this alot, and i know its all true so im sorry...even if u dont want anyone to me, i am...bye jazz
    | Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]


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