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A Letter-1864 Tennessee

Author: Malcolm Bishop
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This was shorter at first because I was quite drunk and I wrote it on a whim. There were suggestions that it should be expanded, I thought they were right. Take care

A Letter-1864 Tennessee

My Sweet Lyla,

I apologize sincerely for not keeping up in my correspondence, I regret this whole heartedly. Not a second goes by that I do not envision your beauty. How is everyone? Is Charles alright? In the last letter I received from you, he had been in a fight. I surely hope he changes his ways. How is mother? How I miss her, God how I miss her. In a few days we will be moving into Dandridge to face Longstreets' scoundrels. I am sure we will rout them convincingly. I pray for this damn war to be over, so that I may be with you, my beloved. Your embrace is what I miss most, the sweet scents that could only come from you. Your hair, seemingly woven from a silken thread. Since this damn mess began, I have bonded with many of the men, we are as brothers now. The meals we eat are barely fit for human consumption, I swear Lyla, I will be joyous never to hear the words "hard tac" again. You would no doubt be surprised to learn that I have become quite competent at the skill of sewing. My uniform gets torn up so much that I had no choice but to acquire this skill. I miss our talks, since this all began I have been fighting for one thing, to get back to you. Have you kept up with your latin? I am starting to forget a little. More and more, one phrase has repeated in my thoughts: ool-luh tuhm in-ee-kwuh puks, kwin bel-loh wel igh-kwees-see-mo seet po-tee- or. "Scarcely is there any peace so unjust that it is better than even the fairest war." I don't know if I believe this or not. I will see you again Lyla, this I swear, I love you now and for all coming sunsets.

Forever your love,

Submitted on 2005-07-07 03:08:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well, I must comment again as you have added some wonderful lines to this write. The expansion of his thoughts on the war, and of his beloved is an excellent addition. It shows a great connection between writer and receiver... and aslo brings us a bit more into his part in the war. Nicely done.
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh wow. Since our country is at war and the hardships and strains it puts on families this piece was appropriate for this time. I like how it's dated 1864 but it can be linked to any war. Sadness between the lines. The desperation and longing is very present in this piece. This shows that love can survive anything. Great job. Really sad but romantic.

-blt :)
| Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
  It sounds like a letter from the cival war, from a man right in the middle of things and only has time for a few words. I agree it could be branched out a bit.. or perhaps added to another part of your writings to bring out the "heart" of it.
An interesting addition to your writings. I enjoyed reading it.
| Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  i Think you should of branched out on the authors love for lyla. It reminds of the sort of letter wives must of received during the war and even now with iraq.
| Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by pontmercy | [ Reply to This ]

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