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    dots Submission Name: empty dreamdots
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    Author: kristian
    ASL Info:    30/male/modesto, ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 71/44/29
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1220
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1241



    Description:
       THIS POEM IS ABOUT ALL THE FAKE THINGS I USED TO KLING TO JUST TO HIDE WHAT IS REAL


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    dotsempty dreamdots
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    my heart is cut all the way down its seam
    easily mended if i could only find the write string
    now trapped inside this empty dream
    i tend to cling to fictional things
    frighten by the loss of something real, so it seems
    i need to redeem the love an trust i once seen
    yet when it comes near i push it away in spite of my fears
    its perfectly clear to me that i keep these tears hidden inside of me

    now here's some termanology "vision is the beautiful art of sight;
    in which i can not be seen"
    can you grasp the concept of this empty dream?



    Now it mat seem like you care, give advise, tell me you'll be there

    But i dont give a f%$k what you say anymore
    if you give a f!%k about me i'd probably just deny you, i'd probably just ignore

    all i need is my music
    but my music has lost its voice
    leaving me to fiend for something solid in this empty dream
    i wish i could sing you the love an trust i once seen
    but i have lost all love
    leaving me alone in this hell, this empty dream.



    Kris Gaskins




    Submitted on 2005-07-07 06:21:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. People don't give you comments that often. That makes me sad, because your stuff is pretty good. I like this, especially because I can imagine it being said in my head. Very nice job, keep it up. Hopefully some more people will comment, you deserve some recognition.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-07-26 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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