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    dots Submission Name: Something to Remember You Bydots

    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 805
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1296

       This is just about a girl dealing with a breakup. Then realizing that judging from what she had, it could never be over. Yes, this is sort of about me, but not really. I just was thinking of a plot to write about and decided that I should think of what it would be like for me to break up with my boyfriend. I'm so emotionally attached to him so this is kind of what I would feel in that situation. Any thoughts on this would be great.

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    dotsSomething to Remember You Bydots

    I still wear that gold bracelett you gave me,
    and your pictures still owns a spot beside my bed,
    and I am not exactly sure why I keep it there,
    but it always helps me cry to sleep.
    Most morning I wake up early,
    and my mind always thinks your there,
    so I'll roll over to my side,
    and it's not all fun and games when I see you're gone.
    My mind hits rewind,
    it flashes a picture of your eyes,
    and it makes me wish I was looking into them,
    just to make me smile once more.
    I was always fond of your voice too,
    on the phone it always gave me that feeling of being safe,
    and we'd talk about living together in a huge house,
    and even planned on trying to have a kid.
    You know, this isn't easy,
    and I'm still sitting by my phone,
    hoping it might ring,
    cause I know that we're not over.
    I, myself, am in complete disbelief,
    "I wil never leave you, I promise",
    I remember you saying those words to me,
    and I wish I could hear you say them again.
    I softly press my hands over my eyes and wipe off the tears,
    and I drift away to sleep,
    and in my imagination,
    my phone rings.

    Submitted on 2005-07-07 13:40:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I liked this poem too! All of your work amazes me. I write a lot of poems like this, but they eventually get lost in my room before I can get a chance to transfer them. v.v... And if these are or were your real feelings, I know this is probably a little late for this situation, but I hope everything works out from now on in your life/love life. Good luck! And once again, this is a fave! <3~

    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by brokenxheartedx | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is so me ...my bf on and of for two years moved about a week ago and hasnt called or anything ... so for the past week ive been waiting ...its hard and this poem really expresses what i have been feeling well its good to know others have been there waiting by the phone not putting the picture away...
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by blacktearz | [ Reply to This ]
      This was my life about a month ago...though it was a simple write "simple" meaning there are no discriptions that pop out or metaphors that grasp the readers muse it is still a read that a lot of people can relate to.
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this. Myboyfriend and I have been together for ever it is hard to imaginelife without. I think the flow was great at the beginning and then at the eight line it get lost and then you pick it up again. Overall it was fasinating.
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by cre | [ Reply to This ]

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