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    dots Submission Name: throw me a bonedots
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    Author: splifford
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 39/42/16
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 358
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 679



    Description:
       throw me a bone, a bone to pick. your fat a** is making me sick.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsthrow me a bonedots
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    so you want to hear more
    i'll tell you the score
    we're having dinner
    you're on the menu

    i think you noticed
    i'm not talking to you
    i can subdue you
    before i cook you through

    i didn't hear you say
    i don't know what to do today
    would you like me to pray
    before i put you away

    i hope you noticed
    i don't want you around
    no more looking at your frown
    chew you up and swallow you down

    so you want to hear more
    to settle the score
    i just told you the story
    sec. before you misquoted me




    Submitted on 2005-07-07 14:22:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i...well, i loved it actually!(haha who would have guessed?!) this seems to be a repeating trend with me...i just can't stop loving other poeples poetry and absolutely despising my own!

    the poem was excellent and i feel that a poem with an awkward or no flow has THAT flow, do you follow me here? the flow is that is isn't. oh, nevermind...i liked the end, that was masterful...i shall quote you sometime(not misquote though, i promise)

    Misty
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
      misquos yea I hate them too watch out you don't get westnile take care of your self
    and your animals keep up the goodwork
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      in my opinion, your rhyming pattern is awkward. its not a horrible job but i couldnt quite get the flow of the poem while i was reading it.
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by wastedROMANCEx | [ Reply to This ]



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