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Submission Name: Creature of the night dots

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Author:	curiosityskitty
ASL Info:	30/F/TN
Elite Ratio:	3.2 - 145/149/30
Words:	114

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	303
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	731

Description:

Creature of the night dots

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Patiently he bides his time
Sheltered from the light
Waiting for the moon to rise
and bring with it the night

When darkness falls he's free again
To feed upon his prey
On silent feet he hunts them down
and carries them away

He sings to them seductive lies
Hypnotic as the rain
Until they offer him their souls
And lose his deadly game

Consumed by need he feeds upon
The life within their veins
Crimson rivers freely flow
And wash away their pain

His hunger filled he once more seeks
His refuge from the sun
He will return to feed again
But now the day has won

Submitted on 2005-07-08 07:51:42 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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2: I dunno...
3: meh!
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||| Comments |||
  Im not much for vampire poems
I mean, If its good, its good you know
This was good
I liked the scheme
Pretty basic, but it works
It should be "when darkness falls"
In that second stanza
I like this
And besides my natural bias for these poems
You did a good job
Be Proud.
Big Bill-
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
  Pretty cool poem. I enjoy the images that were put into my head. I love it when writing like this is vivid. The flow was wonderful, wording great. Nice reading this. Ciao.
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a pretty good poem. I started to look over my shoulder at parts(joking). The phrase Hypnotic as the rain was really catching. I thought that was smooth because the rain does make for a kind of trance. You can avoid starring at it for quite some time and some people get lost in it. You should drop by my sight and read the poem beast within, I think you might like it.
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]
  this was a nice poem. it wasnt too long of a write but it wasnt too short. it was just simple in my opinion and i liked it.:-) at first i thought this would be about an owl but then i realized it was a vampire. good imagery too. nice write!

Brenna
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
  hi,
by reading this poem,I truely felt the eery atmosphere as when we learn or come across a vampire story.the mood was created.hi fi 4 that!Simple language,yet a bit complicated.Good work overall.
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Anju | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is just awesome! Really really good stuff! The story of the vampire is sooo good and the flow and rhyme are perfect. This is so well written, I can't find anything to pick on. I had to read it a couple times just because I like it that much! This is a fave! Hell of a write! A+

Lorna
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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