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    dots Submission Name: Vanity Posedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 692
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    Description:
       I was drawing this guy and he was very obviously aware of it...it was precious the way he held himself when he knew I was watching.


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    dotsVanity Posedots
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    something about the way you toss your hair
    I drew you
    I saw you
    saw every detail in your face
    and I caught some emotions as well

    I know you like to pose
    you know you are beautiful
    I know you watched me watching you
    you know I see it

    something about the way you smile with your eyes
    I drew you
    I saw you
    every wrinkle when your lips turn up to grin
    and I caught some laughter as well

    I know you like it when I look at you
    you know that I enjoy what I see
    silly typical boy
    you are indeed so very vain
    but what a pretty picture you make




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      i liked this peice. it was writin very well. it just all seemed so beautiful. i cant pick a one part that i liked the best or a part that i think needs to be changed because i thought it was all really great and returnung the favor and beinmg truthful. you have a great talent for writng (probably drawing too but i havent seen your work but if its anywhere as near as good as your writng then i know it is great). good job. bye.
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by _Joeysgirl_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey you, i told you it was a good poem, and it is damn it!lol,j/p...but hey did you ever figur out his name or anything about him? well i just wanted to ask and i didnt get to talk to you for like the whole day except 4 like 2 times maybe so call my house sometime k?...l8r Jazz
    | Posted on 2005-07-09 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      I have 2 say what everyone else has said...stalker! LOL Just kidding. I sort of like this. Sometimes...I glare at people...and I can't turn away. Sometimes they are so beautifal or maybe I sense a nice inside beauty as well. It's strange. Nice write. Oh...who was you drawing? Write soon. Lots of luv. Bye.
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah. Stalker.
    Well,
    This is the typical male for you.
    It's what'd you call the glance pose
    The male is always being cautious-
    Make sure his fellow males keep in line
    And looking at the beautiful ladies,
    He looks around to scope the area
    BAM
    He spots you drawing him
    - PANIC INSTILLS-
    "Wait, she's drawing me???"
    Bingo, he adjusted pose
    And without a doubt
    Is wondering how it is coming.
    If he has enough guts,
    He'll come over and ask how is the picture coming =P
    Well, I think I've rambled far too long.
    Good Write.
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      I see some *good* amusement in this. I like how it has your voice, but his too, in a way. And I think the last stanza was perfect.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      Stalker? No... more amused by his eyes. Humanity is victm to itself; we all try to see people as who they are, but in the end we like them for being "pretty"!
    Oh, and the timing was good.
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by writhe | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, well, well... You sound like a stalker. No, actually, you made pretty words of a situation that just seemed rather amusing to me. Pretty, pretty, pretty.
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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