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    dots Submission Name: Missing Piecesdots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I wrote this after reading the only poem that my ex-boyfriend had ever written. It was about how his "new" girlfriend had the missing pieces of his heart. This is my reply to that.

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    dotsMissing Piecesdots

    There are pieces missing in me
    That you needed to be whole
    There are rips and tears all through my heart
    Missing portions of my soul
    There are pieces missing in you
    Something important that is gone
    Pieces you needed to complete the puzzle
    And you can't be alone
    There are pieces missing in me
    Pieces I didn't even know were there
    Pieces that you brought and then took away
    Pieces that the two of us would have to share
    There are pieces missing in you
    And I think I know where they are
    They fill the vacancies in my heart
    When I gaze up at the stars
    There are pieces missing in me
    The biggest being my heart
    You left me to find your missing pieces
    When I've had them from the very start
    There are pieces missing in you
    There are pieces missing from me
    I have your pieces safe in my heart
    I wonder where mine can be?

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      this poem is so sad.. but it seems like ur kinda pissed too i mean i would b if my exbf wrote a poem like that.. i hope everything gets better for you..<3 ash
    | Posted on 2005-07-15 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem so so much...I think that it is just awesome, one of my favorites that you have ever written probably.But yeah talk to you later.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah...lovely lovely poem...I like it a lot. Its so so sad though...I think Tony is a dumdass...he should never has broken up with you... That Tonya is a [censored]...Shes a mean mean lady...
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]

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