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    dots Submission Name: By My Sidedots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       He's always with me, and this was just to illustrate that point.


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    dotsBy My Sidedots
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    Walking through the fog, I see you
    And I wonder who you are
    I look at the man I once loved openly,
    The one I still love from afar
    Trudging through the rain, I feel you
    As if you're here beside of me
    I kiss your lips and dream my dreams
    Of what we used to be
    Driving through the snow, I lose you
    But you're always here right by my side
    Though your heart no longer belongs to me
    I still feel how you loved me inside
    Lying in the sunshine, I dream of you
    And I lovingly touch your face
    I gave you everything I used to be
    And now I wonder what has taken it's place.




    Submitted on 2005-07-08 11:42:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is a great write. I'm sure you will get him back one day. Maybe you should let him read this and tell him how much you still love him and miss him. This has a great flow and didn't lose my interest at any point. Great job and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-07-09 00:00:00 | by Starry Eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem although it brings back bad memories for me..lol.. but it reminds me of a lost love. the poem is a little sad to when you read it and think about your lost love. i like poem like that which make you remember things to me it means you know how they feel. its good
    cherry
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by cherrypie | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooohhh... Nice! I love how you turn a lot around in this. The issues raised are poignant and the presentation is wonderful. Love the differing thoughts.

    nice work
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by _n3pt | [ Reply to This ]


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