lost words -------------------------------------------
lost words
never spoken
pain inside
always choking
hatefull lies inside me
why cant they jus let me be
the love never dies
but lives inside
mystery thoughts
swarming around
the hate inside can not subside
short but sweet. good i liked it. it could have been a little longer but over all great write. i think u should have put in more detail. keep it up. kelly
I can see that this poem is a very free verse poem. I can relate to the poem because I've been through something simliar to what you may be going threw. I love the poem because it makes me feel relived that someone had the braveness to write this type of poem. If I was to given you something to imporve on it would be the length. This poem feels very orginial. Great job and keep writing!
interesting...this is short, and a little choppy, perhaps a revision? it has a decent rhyming scheme to it, and it flows a bit, but overall, it is lacking. It needs a subject mainly I think. Decent try nonetheless.
Submission Name: lost words
