Waking Dreams of Dawn by clay

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Submission Name: Waking Dreams of Dawn dots

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Author:	clay
ASL Info:	35/F/B.C.
Elite Ratio:	5.68 - 730/592/66
Words:	92

Class/Type:	Prose/Passion
Total Views:	477
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	581

Description:

Written for Shaman/Dave for he brings out the internal in me

Thanks for being you...and so much more
More prose in poetic form...so yeah it's a little short, not quite a story and yet not quite a poem... a little mixture of the two.

Do what you will ;)

Waking Dreams of Dawn dots

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Thinking, I'd love to escape into the silence of your eyes...as the loud world between us deafens my sight.

I'll chisel away time and space, by tracing you beautiful; across the sky with Northern light eyes that dance, rhythmically beating to the moon and stars.

My wish for you...

[this ravenous night of awakening dreams]

is breathtaking seams, flawless and bright with a smile of fire beyond words for you are just that...beyond words, found and only heard within sound of my heart.

Submitted on 2005-07-08 16:29:28 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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   I agree with Magnicat simply beautiful its a wonderful piece written for a wonderful soul.

and this time i am proud to say there's no spelling boo boo's to tell you about its all good.
And the picture of the Northern lights is an added plus that works well with the piece
your words flow like the Northern lights
I know the friendship between you two and its wonderful to have a friend who can bring out a part of you that wasn't there.
My feeling on this piece is you have a friend that you will have forever and that is special to be able to have a guy friend who is a good guy friend.Great write kelly you again wrote from the heart and i felt it thankYou for coming back to the site hon you were missed bigtime

| Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
  simply beautiful Kelly.. i love the idea of escaping "into the silence of your eyes..." my girl has a tint of lavender in her eyes that i could just stare into forever and will..
i am so happy that you have found such love, what a wonderful gift that will flourish and grow. i've missed your beautiful writings and was overjoyed to find this little gem!
thanks for sharing your beauty with us.
@ peace&joy @
!Cat
| Posted on 2005-07-09 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  this was great :) i love all the imagery. im a sucker for imagery. and this was chock full o it. it PERFECTLY described the beauty and mystery of nature and this is truely awe inspiring. you yourself could be the northern lights, you awe inspiring awe inspirer.
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
  This was beautiful. The picture, the words came together as one. You described them so...it's just awesome. I had the liberty to see the beauty of the "Northern Lights" in Alaska. You laid them right before my eyes . Just reading your piece again made my heart full. I wish everyone once in their life could witness the "Northern Lights' and then they would really understand and enjoy your beautiful worded piece...Great Poem/prose! I also have written a piece about the "Auroras". I'll be submitting it later on down the line. you take care...wanda
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmm as fiery said this isnt a poem or prose this is a painting a beautiful one at that i felt like i could see the artists brush against the canvas as the images became more and more vivid good write
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Shadows Life | [ Reply to This ]
  I have to say that if Cat and I were living together there might be much less of us on the site. So I understand why we must wait for these gems to come around. But mostly, don't let them go by even if you don't post them, jot the ideas down somewhere, you'll be glad you did. Loverly as usual, beauty
you so deserve everything that's blossoming in your life.
much love,
Nan
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  beautifully said clay beautifully said. you did a good job painting a picture, i love the imagery and description you give. a prose/poem that will take a while to forget. there is no is are no critiques or compliments i can give this piece. no words will compare to the work you just posted. i absolutely love this. thanks for the read
tracey
| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
  Well hello! long time no speak! My friend this was truly beautiful and seriously an uplifting read that I really needed today. I loved the bit about escaping into the silence of your eyes. How comforting it is to feel the gaze of a loved one apon us. I can offer you nothing but my praise. This seems to be the happiest piece I can recall having read of your works. And I must say that makes me happy. I hope life finds you well and that you continue to write such literary gold!
| Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
  That is beautifully written and so sensual and sweet. I am from Alaska, and the northern lights in this touched me. There have been many moments that the northern lights seemed to carry some sort of significance to me at the time. Very nice...

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| Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Indigo Kid | [ Reply to This ]

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